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If food tastes good, it is probably bad for you. How far do you agree with this statement? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion v.1

If food tastes good, it is probably bad for you. How far Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion v. 1
In many countries, online shopping has gained in popularity and outweighed brick-and- mortar stores, and this trend has been receiving a great deal of public attention. Although this development is not without disadvantages, the upsides will justify these. There are a number of drawback of online shopping. First, since online customers cannot touch and feel the product physically before making buying decisions, they are able to gain bad experiences of shopping. In fact, many online stores are likely to deliver fake or low-quality items for the purpose of increasing profits in a deceptive way, leading to customers’ frustration as a result. Second, by placing orders and completing online transactions, shoppers will be able to run the risk of being victimised by computer crimes, such as ID theft. This means that e-commerce has been a breeding ground for hi-tech crimes, like hackers, which makes their personal information invaded. There are, however, some dazzling advantages that can easily overshadow the disadvantages. First, in order to purchase a variety of products with less time, busy people don't require physical travel. For example, consumers can own comparative price items or a door to door service with only a click mouse, which helps buyers save more time for other activities. Second, if retailers do not afford to establish brick-and-mortar stores, an online store is a feasible solution. This means that it’s not essential to hire an office or staff, which helps to save costs for small businesses. In conclusion, it be would concede that e-shopping trend does come with some adverse effects, yet the benefits created by it far eclipse the disadvantages.
In
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countries,
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online
shopping has gained in popularity and outweighed brick-and- mortar
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stores
, and this trend has been receiving a great deal of public attention. Although this development is not without disadvantages, the upsides will justify these.

There are a number of drawback of
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online
shopping.
First
, since
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online
customers cannot touch and feel the product
physically
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before
making buying decisions, they are able to gain
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bad
experiences of shopping. In fact,
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many
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online
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stores
are likely to deliver fake or low-quality items for the purpose of increasing profits
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in a deceptive way
, leading to customers’ frustration
as a result
. Second, by placing orders and completing
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online
transactions, shoppers will be able to run the
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risk
of being
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victimised
by computer crimes, such as ID theft. This means that e-commerce has been a breeding ground for hi-tech crimes, like hackers, which
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makes
their personal information invaded.

There are,
however
,
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some
dazzling advantages that can
easily
overshadow the disadvantages.
First
, in order to
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purchase
a variety of products with less time, busy
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people
don't require physical travel.
For example
, consumers can
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own
comparative price items or a
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door to door
service with
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only
a click mouse, which
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helps
buyers save more time for other activities. Second, if retailers do not afford to establish brick-and-mortar
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stores
, an
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online
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store
is a feasible solution. This means that it’s not essential to hire an office or staff, which
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helps
to save costs for
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small
businesses.

In conclusion
, it
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be
would concede that e-shopping trend does
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come
with
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some
adverse effects,
yet
the benefits created by it far eclipse the disadvantages.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay If food tastes good, it is probably bad for you. How far Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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