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Although more and more people read news on the internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.12

Although more and more people read news on the internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news. v. 12
In this day and age, it is irrefutable to say that the current affairs play a pivotal role in improving our knowledge and skills. Some people think that newspapers are the best source of daily news, however, I personally believe that the World Wide Web is a better replacement to get current affairs. Firstly, the internet provides us with unlimited source of information on computers and phones. We can instantly get updated with the latest news of our interest at any hour. Moreover, it also gives us the privilege to see videos, audios and images to show an exact situation of an important event. For example, if there is a significant political speech going on in our country, we can quickly get to see the live footage on the internet to know the actual facts and figures. On the other hand, newspapers have very limited updates and current affairs. In addition, newspapers are printed at the end of a particular day, therefore, we get to know about an event 24 hours later. This limitation substantially delays the speed of news delivered to us. Another point to be noted is that a huge amount of paper is consumed every day to print our newspapers, which leads to wastage of raw paper. Don't these limitations clearly bring us to a conclusion that the cyberspace is much better option for our news feeds? Yes, it surely has. All in all, the internet is a blessing in our modern era of information and technology. People should take cognizance of this fact, and we should switch towards world wide web to fulfil our daily need of essential knowledge.
In this day and age, it is irrefutable to say that the
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current
affairs play a pivotal role in improving our knowledge and
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skills
.
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Some
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people
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think
that
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newspapers
are the best source of daily
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
,
however
, I
personally
believe that the World Wide Web is a better replacement to
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get
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
affairs.

Firstly
, the internet provides us with unlimited source of information on computers and phones. We can
instantly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
updated with the latest
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
of our interest at any hour.
Moreover
, it
also
gives us the privilege to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
videos, audios and images to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
an exact situation of an
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
.
For example
, if there is a significant political speech going on in our country, we can
quickly
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get
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
footage on the internet to know the actual facts and figures.

On the other hand
,
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newspapers
have
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very
limited updates and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
affairs.
In addition
,
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newspapers
are printed
at the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
of a particular day,
therefore
, we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
to know about an
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
24 hours later. This limitation
substantially
delays the speed of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
delivered to us. Another point to
be noted
is that a huge amount of paper
is consumed
every day to print our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
newspapers
, which leads to wastage of raw paper. Don't these limitations
clearly
bring us to a conclusion that the cyberspace is much better option for our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
feeds? Yes, it
surely
has.

All in all, the internet is a blessing in our modern era of information and technology.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
People
should take cognizance of this fact, and we should switch towards
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world wide web
to fulfil our daily need of essential knowledge.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Although more and more people read news on the internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news. v. 12

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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