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If an individual acts in an anti social way such as for commenting the crime who is to be blamed the society and individual? What are the reasons behind such as behaviour? Who should be responsible for this?

If an individual acts in an anti social way such as for commenting the crime who is to be blamed the society and individual? What are the reasons behind such as behaviour? Who should be responsible for this? Lq2RK
It is often argued that, if human laws in offensive way likewise admiting the crime who is tobe responsible for society and masses. There are several factors due to unemployment, poverty, lack of education. Government and society must be more responsible for this phenomenon. To commence with, there are multiforious factors behind the anti-social behaviour such as serious crime. First and foremost, masses who commit the fatal crime due to lack of education and unemployment. They do not have any other kind of option to fulfill their needs. In other words, if poverty rate has been increasing rapidly, the crime ratio also go up. Civilians who have not employment to earn bread and butter for their family. In this case, they choose short way to get money from criminal activities like kidnapping, blackmailing and so on. Along with who have not appropriate academic qualification owing to happen crime in their life. For an instance, a survey was conducted by Canadian government found that 50% of migrants commited crime who had lack of knowledge about education and they suffered from poverty. However, authority and society ought to more and more responsible for this matter. Firstly, the majority of masses faces a lot of obstacles in their livelihood meanwhile they have to indulge in criminal activities. Although, lawmakers have implicated some of law for reducing the crime rate yet the majority of civilians are doing rapidly. In spite of establish new factories and work should be provided by authority along with they should give maximum salary as per their work. In addition, not only government should control this situation but also society must tackle with this phenomena. Last but not least, society should apriciate those who left criminal activities in their life and they do work in companies and hotels for fulfill their needs and perhaps get handsome salary. For an example, a heading of famous newspaper Moscow times relieved that approximately over and half of nations are providing employment and giving a variety of facilities like household weges and pensions due to control crime rate. In conclusion, plethora of masses who not able to get money from respectful organisations owing to lack of qualification. Although, government have already implement several laws for those who have not academic knowledge. Lawmakers should give jobs and free of education to them.
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argued that, if human laws in offensive way
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admiting
the
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crime
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who
is
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tobe
responsible for
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society
and masses. There are several factors due to unemployment, poverty,
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lack
of
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education
.
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and
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society
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must
be more responsible for this phenomenon. To commence with, there are
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multiforious
factors behind the anti-social
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behaviour
such as serious
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crime
.
First
and foremost, masses
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who
commit the fatal
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crime
due to
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lack
of
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education
and unemployment. They do not have any other kind of option to fulfill their needs.
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, if poverty rate has been increasing
rapidly
, the
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crime
ratio
also
go up. Civilians
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who
have not employment to earn bread and butter for their family.
In this case
, they choose short way to
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get
money from criminal activities like kidnapping, blackmailing and
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so
on. Along with
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who
have not appropriate academic qualification owing to happen
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crime
in their life. For an instance, a survey
was conducted
by Canadian
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government
found that 50% of migrants
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commited
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crime
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who
had
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lack
of knowledge about
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education and
they suffered from poverty.
However
, authority and
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society
ought to more and more responsible for this matter.
Firstly
, the majority of masses faces
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a lot of
obstacles in their livelihood meanwhile they
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have to
indulge in criminal activities. Although, lawmakers have implicated
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some of law
for reducing the
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crime
rate
yet
the majority of civilians are doing
rapidly
.
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establish new factories and work should
be provided
by authority along with they should give maximum salary as per their work.
In addition
, not
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only
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government
should control this situation
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but
also
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society
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must
tackle with
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this
phenomena. Last
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but
not least,
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society
should
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apriciate
those
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who
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left
criminal activities in their
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life and
they do work in
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companies
and hotels for fulfill their needs and perhaps
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get
handsome salary. For an example, a heading of
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famous
newspaper Moscow times relieved that approximately over and half of nations are providing employment and giving a variety of facilities like household
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weges
and pensions due to control
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crime
rate.
In conclusion
, plethora of masses
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who
not able to
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get
money from respectful
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organisations
owing to
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lack
of qualification. Although,
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government
have already implement several laws for those
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who
have not academic knowledge. Lawmakers should give jobs and free of
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education
to them.
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IELTS essay If an individual acts in an anti social way such as for commenting the crime who is to be blamed the society and individual? What are the reasons behind such as behaviour? Who should be responsible for this?

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