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I try to be the best parent that I can be

I try to be the best parent that I can be QRA79
Since I have kids, I always want to give them all the best things and I always try to be the best parent that I can be. To begin with, I try to be a good provider. I work two jobs at the same time to certain that my children will have all the necessary conditions. Furthermore, I spend money on my kids rather than on myself. Besides, I try to spend most of my time with my children. In the evening, I spend time cooking dinner for them. In my free time, I play and have a fun time with my kids. Last but not least, I try to listen to and help my children whether they have any problems. I tell them to talk to me so we can understand each other. I sometimes give them advice in some cases. To draw a conclusion, I try to be the best parent that I can be to give my children the best life.
Since I have kids, I always want to give them all the
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things and I always try to be the
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best
parent that I can be. To
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provider. I work two jobs at the same
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to certain that my
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children
will have all the necessary conditions.
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, I spend money on my kids
rather
than on myself.
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, I try to spend most of my
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time
with my
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children
. In the evening, I spend
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time
cooking dinner for them. In my free
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time
, I play and have a fun
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time
with my kids. Last
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not least, I try to listen to and
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help
my
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children
whether they have any problems. I
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them to talk to me
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we can understand each other. I
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sometimes
give them advice in
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cases. To draw a conclusion, I try to be the
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parent that I can be to give my
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the
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life.

IELTS essay I try to be the best parent that I can be

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
164 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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