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I have been to many famous places in Sapa, and they have one thing in common: the scenery is very wonderful. Especially my trip to the top of Fansipan, the highest mountain in Vietnam, where the scenery is very majestic. Here I can touch the clouds that I normally can only see in the sky. And the feeling of riding the cable car in Sapa is the longest in the world which feels like you are on an airplane, but it is shaped like a car with many seats. Sometimes there is a strong wind passing, it will shake so sometimes it feels quite scary. But its view is super beautiful that is the forest, stream, house on the mountain.

I have been to many famous places in Sapa, and they have one thing in common: the scenery is very wonderful. Especially my trip to the top of Fansipan, the highest mountain in Vietnam, where the scenery is very majestic. Here I can touch the clouds that I normally can only see in the sky. And the feeling of riding the cable car in Sapa is the longest in the world which feels like you are on an airplane, but it is shaped like a car with many seats. Sometimes there is a strong wind passing, it will shake so sometimes it feels quite scary. But its view is super beautiful that is the forest, stream, house on the mountain. NwmK2
I have been to many famous places in Sapa, and they have one thing in common: the scenery is very wonderful. Especially my trip to the top of Fansipan, the highest mountain in Vietnam, where the scenery is very majestic. Here I can touch the clouds that I normally can only see in the sky. And the feeling of riding the cable car in Sapa is the longest in the world which feels like you are on an airplane, but it is shaped like a car with many seats. Sometimes there is a strong wind passing, it will shake so sometimes it feels quite scary. But its view is super beautiful that is the forest, stream, house on the mountain.
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IELTS essay I have been to many famous places in Sapa, and they have one thing in common: the scenery is very wonderful. Especially my trip to the top of Fansipan, the highest mountain in Vietnam, where the scenery is very majestic. Here I can touch the clouds that I normally can only see in the sky. And the feeling of riding the cable car in Sapa is the longest in the world which feels like you are on an airplane, but it is shaped like a car with many seats. Sometimes there is a strong wind passing, it will shake so sometimes it feels quite scary. But its view is super beautiful that is the forest, stream, house on the mountain.

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