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I agree with the statement that life today is more easier and comfortable than it was when our grandparents were children. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in following eassy. v.2

I agree with the statement that life today is more easier and comfortable than it was when our grandparents were children. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in following eassy. v. 2
I agree with the statement that life today is easier and comfortable than it was when our grandparents were children. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay. First of all, transportation became far better than what it was around seventy years ago. Having good transportation always make life easier like we can go anytime, anywhere we want, which was not that easy around seven decades ago. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. About ten days ago, I was sitting with my grandfather, and he is telling me a story about his childhood incident. He said, his friend, who lives in the nearby town, got seriously sick one day and someone told him about that. He eagerly wants to go to see him but he can' t because he does not have his own vehicle and bus will start the next morning. Similarly, my friend got injured in a car accident, he told me to come, and I immediately picked up the keys to my car and went there. Since I have my car, I don' t need to wait for anybody or public transport. I can easily go there and help him with whatever he required. As a result, life becomes easier for me also and for my friend also. Second, the presence of high-speed internet which was invented a few years back. Internet solves a lot many problems for us, knowingly or unknowingly, starting from morning till night. Helping from finding a location on the map, meaning of words, reading online books, online shopping, etc. These are just a few use cases which become part of our daily lives. In contrast, during the time of our grandparent' s childhood, they don' t have any internet. For books, they have to go to the library and sometimes books are not even available. For shopping, they need to go to the market, but unfortunately, it was closed sometimes, so they need to go again. Therefore, life was difficult at that time. For instance, during my college time, I was in serious need of money for tuition fees, so I reached to my friend, who lived in another city and told him about the problem. He immediately transferred me the amount via net-banking, which is possible only through the internet. As a result, life has become very comfortable and easier. In sum, though some may oppose the statement, I think life has become very smooth and relax. Not only because of better transportation but also because of high-speed internet. I think it will even become smoother in the future.
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is easier and comfortable than it was when our grandparents were children. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.

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transportation always
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make
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easier like we can go anytime, anywhere we want, which was not that easy around seven decades ago. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. About ten days ago, I was sitting with my grandfather, and he is telling me a story about his childhood incident. He said, his
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friend
, who
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lives
in the nearby town,
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him about that. He
eagerly
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vehicle and bus will
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start
the
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, my
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, and I immediately picked up the keys to my car and went there. Since I have my car, I
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to wait for anybody or public transport. I can
easily
go there and
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help
him with whatever he required.
As a result
,
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life
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becomes
easier for me
also
and for my
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also
.

Second, the presence of high-speed internet which
was invented
a few years back. Internet solves a lot
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problems for us,
knowingly
or
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, starting from morning till night. Helping from finding a location on the map, meaning of words, reading online books, online shopping, etc. These are
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a few
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cases which
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part of our daily
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.
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go to the library and
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sometimes
books are not even available. For shopping, they
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need
to go to the market,
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unfortunately, it
was closed
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,
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they
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to go again.
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,
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was difficult at that time.
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, during my college time, I was in serious
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need
of money for tuition fees,
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I reached to my
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friend
, who
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lived
in another city and
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told
him about the problem. He immediately transferred me the amount via net-banking, which is possible
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only
through the internet.
As a result
,
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life
has
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very
comfortable and easier.

In sum, though
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may oppose the statement, I
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has
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very
smooth and relax. Not
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of better transportation
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also
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of high-speed internet. I
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it will even
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smoother in the future.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay I agree with the statement that life today is more easier and comfortable than it was when our grandparents were children. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in following eassy. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
438 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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