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Humpback whales travel for food and proliferation.

Humpback whales travel for food and proliferation. The article asserts they use stars as a guide for migration similar to the sailors using numerous examples and reasons. However, the professor cites an array of reasons and examples to reject points in the reading. First, the writer believes the whales' brain has an intricate structure that is considered as a factor for intelligence, as a result, they are highly intelligent. This intelligence assists them to find their way through the migration by stars. On the contrary, the professor declares other animals, for example, ducks are able to use stars for navigating, while they are not that astute. Second, the writer explains whales movement is a straight line. The pattern of their travels reveals that they adapt themselves with external phenomena to follow such straight lines. In the ocean the only external signs are stars, in contrast with fields that other signs are available. Therefore, they use stars to find the correct way through their journey. Conversely, the speaker notes the other external force that whales probably use is the magnetic field of earth. The whales possibly use a bio-magnetic property to navigate. Finally, the writer discusses whales exhibit abnormal activities during their migration that is called spy-hopping. Due to this behavior, it shows they search the stars to find their way. In contrast, the speaker points out other animals are also treated in the same manner occasionally, when following fishing for hunting. Moreover, this behavior is visible on the days. Due to this fact, it doesn't relate to the stars and navigation. To sum, the writer suggests while we don't know much about the procedure of migration in animals, there are some reasons that show whales use stars to navigate. On the contrary, the speaker opposes reasons stated in the reading and contrast them using several examples and reasons.
Humpback
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travel for food and proliferation. The article asserts they
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use
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stars
as a guide for
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migration
similar to the sailors using numerous
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examples
and
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reasons
.
However
, the professor cites an array of
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reasons
and
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examples
to reject points in the reading.

First
, the
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writer
believes the whales' brain has an intricate structure that
is considered
as a factor for intelligence,
as a result
, they are
highly
intelligent. This intelligence assists them to find their way through the
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migration
by
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stars
.
On the contrary
, the professor declares
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other
animals, for
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example
, ducks are able to
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use
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stars
for navigating, while they are not that astute.

Second, the
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writer
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explains
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whales
movement is a straight line. The pattern of their travels reveals that they adapt themselves with external phenomena to follow such straight lines. In the ocean the
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only
external signs are
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stars
,
in contrast
with fields that
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other
signs are available.
Therefore
, they
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use
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stars
to find the correct way through their journey.
Conversely
, the speaker notes the
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other
external force that
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whales
probably
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use
is the magnetic field of earth. The
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possibly
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use
a bio-magnetic property to navigate.

Finally
, the
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writer
discusses
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whales
exhibit abnormal activities during their
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migration
that
is called
spy-hopping. Due to this behavior, it
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shows
they search the
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stars
to find their way.
In contrast
, the speaker points out
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other
animals are
also
treated in the same manner
occasionally
, when following fishing for hunting.
Moreover
, this behavior is visible on the days. Due to this fact, it doesn't relate to the
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stars
and navigation.

To sum, the
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writer
suggests while we don't know much about the procedure of
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migration
in animals, there are
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some
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reasons
that
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show
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whales
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use
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stars
to navigate.
On the contrary
, the speaker opposes
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reasons
stated in the reading and contrast them using several
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examples
and
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.
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IELTS essay Humpback whales travel for food and proliferation.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
308 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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