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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Fast & safe transportation system and improved communication are two important aspects of the development of a country. Every government works for it citizens to commute safely and quickly while businesses also depend on a solid transportation system. Thus when the question arises whether a government should focus on improving its railways or roads, people seem like have divided opinions. I personally agree that a government should spend more money on railways system. Fast of all, railways offer safe commuting both for the citizens and traders. The numbers of road accidents and highway casualties in many countries are far higher than that of the railway casualties. Thus investing more on a safe way of commuting is a much more prudent idea. Rails cause comparatively less environmental damage while the road vehicles are the main reason for increasing pollution around the world. Second, rails can carry hundreds of people and several hundred tonnes of goods while road transports can carry only a few. Some shuttle trains are many times faster than that of private cars and public buses. Thus improved railways would save peoples’ valuable time every day. Thirdly, rail lines are usually away from the main cities and that is why some busy cities have no other alternatives than to improve their rail transportation system. Express trains can reduce the traffic congestion in many cities and more investment to improve the railway is the only possible solutions in cities where a large number of people live in. Finally, the population of the world is increasing rapidly and that is why investing more money on faster and dependable transportation system is more logical than investing in the older transportation system. Railways will be future in transportation and investment on it is the better choice for any government. In conclusion, I believe that a government, either in a developed or a developing country, should invest to build a safer, faster and more reliable transportation system and the railway, for this reason, should get a priority.
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and
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improved
communication are two
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important
aspects of the development of a country. Every
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government
works for it citizens to commute
safely
and
quickly
while businesses
also
depend on a solid
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transportation
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system
.
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Thus
when the question arises whether a
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government
should focus on improving its
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railways
or
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roads
,
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people
seem like have divided opinions. I
personally
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agree
that a
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government
should spend more money on
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railways
system.

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Fast
of all,
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railways
offer safe commuting both for the citizens and traders. The numbers of
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road
accidents and highway casualties in
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many
countries are far higher than that of the
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railway
casualties.
Thus
investing more on a safe way of commuting is a much more prudent
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idea
. Rails cause
comparatively
less environmental damage while the
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road
vehicles are the main reason for increasing pollution around the world.

Second, rails can carry hundreds of
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people
and several hundred tonnes of
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goods
while
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road
transports can carry
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only
a few.
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Some
shuttle trains are
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many
times faster than that of private cars and public buses.
Thus
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improved
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railways
would save
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peoples’
valuable time every day.
Thirdly
,
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rail
lines are
usually
away from the main
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cities
and
that is
why
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busy
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cities
have no other alternatives than to
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improve
their
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rail
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transportation
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system
. Express trains can
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reduce
the traffic congestion in
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many
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cities
and more investment to
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improve
the
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railway
is the
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only
possible solutions in
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cities
where
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a large number of
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people
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live
in.

Finally
, the population of the world is increasing
rapidly
and
that is
why investing more money on faster and dependable
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transportation
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system
is more logical than investing in the older
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transportation
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system
.
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Railways
will be future in
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transportation
and investment on it is the better choice for any
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government
.

In conclusion
, I believe that a
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government
, either in a developed or a
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developing country
, should invest to build a safer, faster and more reliable
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transportation
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system
and the
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railway
,
for this reason
, should
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get
a priority.
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IELTS essay Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement?

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
333 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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