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Human activity has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe actions can be taken to bring about a change. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.9

Human activity has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe actions can be taken to bring about a change. v. 9
It is irrefutable that the ecosystem all over the globe is dangerously affected by the exploitation of mankind. Some intellectuals opine that this practice will never change, whereas others consider that the preventive actions by human beings could bring positive results. This essay will analyze both the views, along with my opinion. To begin with, regarding the former view, the unsustainable exploitation of natural resources is done by humans to fulfill their desires. Consequently, people are not bothering about the detrimental impact on the indigenous flora and fauna due to such activities. Moreover, the greedy nature of a human only focuses on their needs and prosperity instead of the surrounding creatures. For instance, the concrete jungle of human society has wiped out many aboriginal plants and animals from their habitats. Thus, it is very hard to believe that the actions of mankind might change and restore the natural ecosystem. On the other hand, some people having an optimistic view consider that people are also moving towards development by preserving natural habitats. Furthermore, such environmentally conscious people reckon their responsibility towards nature and coexistent creatures. For example, many conservation centers have been established in efforts to preserve their indigenous plants and animals, which might come endangered in the future. As a result, the population of these plants and animals could be maintained for a balanced ecosystem. In conclusion, even though it is true that some impacts caused by the human community on the nature are irreversible, preventive steps could improve the present scenario. In my opinion, the firm determination of all the citizens could contribute to restoring the natural habitat and fruitful outcomes can be expected.
It is irrefutable that the ecosystem all over the globe is
dangerously
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affected
by the exploitation of mankind.
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Some
intellectuals opine that this practice will never
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change
, whereas others consider that the preventive actions by
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human
beings could bring
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positive
results. This essay will analyze both the views, along with my opinion.

To
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begin
with, regarding the former view, the unsustainable exploitation of
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natural
resources
is done
by
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humans
to fulfill their desires.
Consequently
,
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people
are not bothering about the detrimental impact on the indigenous flora and fauna due to such activities.
Moreover
, the greedy nature of a
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human
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only
focuses on their needs and prosperity
instead
of the surrounding creatures.
For instance
, the concrete jungle of
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human
society has wiped out
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many
aboriginal plants and animals from their habitats.
Thus
, it is
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very
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hard
to believe that the actions of mankind might
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change
and restore the
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natural
ecosystem.

On the other hand
,
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some
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people
having an optimistic view consider that
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people
are
also
moving towards development by preserving
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natural
habitats.
Furthermore
, such
environmentally
conscious
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people
reckon their responsibility towards nature and coexistent creatures.
For example
,
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many
conservation centers have
been established
in efforts to preserve their indigenous plants and animals, which might
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
endangered in the future.
As a result
, the population of these plants and animals could
be maintained
for a balanced ecosystem.

In conclusion
,
even though
it is true that
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some
impacts caused by the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
human
community on the nature are irreversible, preventive steps could
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improve
the present scenario. In my opinion, the firm determination of all the citizens could contribute to restoring the
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natural
habitat and fruitful outcomes can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expected
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Human activity has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe actions can be taken to bring about a change. v. 9

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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