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Human activities have negative effect on plant and animal species. some people think it is too late to do anything about this problem. Other believe that effective measures can be taken to improve this situation. discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Human activities have negative effect on plant and animal species. some people think it is too late to do anything about this problem. Other believe that effective measures can be taken to improve this situation. v. 1
Nowadays, The worlds empty land which do not have any use till, has been under attack by the construction of buildings, industries, etc. These all are create the negative effects on plants and animal species. From that, some public think that, it is too late to take an action against these crises and this problem. While, On the other hand, some believe that this affirmation and effective measures can be taken to promote and decline these situations. I totally agree with the later side of my statements. Firstly, The human activities such as deforestation and construct a building anywhere will damage so many fertile lands which we can use as an agricultural side. In addition, This land will also useful for the plant and animals too. Furthermore, This effect can reduce by give a perfect guidance for the citizens and for the uneducated class. Therefore, We save that fertile ground so we can use for other so many purposes and from that we save the environment too. Secondly, Natural hazard is the major problems which create the pollution by the human activities and that destroy plethoras of animals and forest too. If the public will be taking an action against pollution we can save them and other too. Moreover, If we all Indians take the pledge that one person can grow compulsory at least one plant, Then the population of 1. 3 billion people can change these negative effect and rescue them lives. This will improve the situation and sure will be said that the better days will come. In contrast, Some people think that we save our lives because that is more important compare with plants and animals is not profitable for us. But, This will also impact on our lives too. Because, we all are depending on each and another for our biological cycle, so far that the government take strict actions against them and they also provide the basic information through the campaign and also spread in social media and take other ways too and take responsibility to change the thought of these citizen. To conclude, I completely agree with my decision that people still do not lose their hope to take some good steps and save the plants and animal species who all are in danger or not. But, It is our duty to save the world from the negative impact on them.
Nowadays, The worlds empty land which do not have any
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use
till, has been under attack by the construction of buildings, industries, etc. These all are create the
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negative
effects on
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plants
and
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animal
species. From that,
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some
public
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think
that, it is too late to take an action against these crises and this problem. While, On the
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other
hand,
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some
believe that this affirmation and effective measures can
be taken
to promote and decline these situations. I
totally
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agree
with the later side of my statements.

Firstly
, The human activities such as deforestation and construct a building anywhere will damage
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so
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many
fertile lands which we can
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use
as an agricultural side.
In addition
, This land will
also
useful for the
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plant
and
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animals
too.
Furthermore
, This effect can
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reduce
by give a perfect guidance for the citizens and for the uneducated
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class
.
Therefore
, We
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save
that fertile ground
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so
we can
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use
for
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other
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so
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many
purposes and from that we
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save
the environment too.

Secondly
, Natural hazard is the major problems which create the pollution by the human activities and that
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destroy
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plethoras
of
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animals
and forest too. If the public will be taking an action against pollution we can
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save
them and
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other
too.
Moreover
, If we all Indians take the pledge that one person can grow compulsory at least one
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plant
, Then the population of 1. 3 billion
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people
can
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change
these
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negative
effect and rescue them
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lives
. This will
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improve
the situation and sure will
be said
that the better days will
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come
.

In contrast
,
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Some
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people
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think
that we
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save
our
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lives
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because
that is
more
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important
compare with
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plants
and
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animals
is not profitable for us.
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But
, This will
also
impact on our
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lives
too.
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Because
, we all
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are depending
on each and another for our biological cycle,
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so
far that the
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government
take strict actions against
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them and
they
also
provide the basic information through the campaign and
also
spread in social media and take
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other
ways too and take responsibility to
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change
the
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thought
of
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these citizen
.

To conclude
, I completely
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agree
with my decision that
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people
still
do not lose their hope to take
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some
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good
steps and
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save
the
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plants
and
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animal
species who all are in
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danger
or not.
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But
, It is our duty to
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save
the world from the
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negative
impact on them.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Human activities have negative effect on plant and animal species. some people think it is too late to do anything about this problem. Other believe that effective measures can be taken to improve this situation. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
397 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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