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Human activities have led negative effects on plant and animals all over the world. Some people think it is too late to do something about it. Others think there is still some time to take actions. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Human activities have led negative effects on plant and animals all over the world. Some people think it is too late to do something about it. Others think there is still some time to take actions. v. 1
Some people think that it is of crucial importance to keep both home and workplace tidy and clutterless. I strongly agree with the statement mentioned above, as it helps one in saving time and money. Also, it helps in leaving a long-lasting impression on the people around them. Keeping things clean and well-organized in both personal and professional lives can help one in keeping track of them. This, in turn, facilitates one in saving time, especially in crunch situations where one needs to act promptly. Morning is an excellent example of such situations when people usually to go to work. Disorganized people spend several minutes in finding essential items like keys, wallet and mobile phone, thereby wasting valuable time. In many cases, the items are never found, leading to further frustration, as it results in the loss of money, apart from time. In addition, keeping things tidy and clutter-free at both home and in the office provides one with a chance of leaving a long-lasting impression on others. The qualities, as mentioned earlier, are always linked to one’s personality, which is continuously being judged by others. Neighbors and workplace colleagues always feel attracted to one that keeps their personal belongings clean and in an orderly fashion. Based on such good qualities, one might be able to establish good terms with the surrounding neighbors or with bosses, eventually helping them succeed in both personal and professional lives. In conclusion, keeping belongings organized and neat saves one time and money. Besides, it also opens new doors for one to establish better relationships in both personal and professional capacities.
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keep
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clutterless
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helps
one in saving
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time
and money.
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, it
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helps
in leaving a long-lasting impression on the
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people
around them.

Keeping things clean and well-organized in both
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personal
and professional
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lives
can
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help
one in keeping
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track
of them. This, in turn, facilitates one in saving
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time
,
especially
in crunch situations where one needs to act
promptly
. Morning is an excellent example of such situations when
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people
usually
to go to work. Disorganized
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people
spend several minutes in finding essential items like keys, wallet and mobile phone, thereby wasting valuable
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time
. In
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many
cases, the items are never found, leading to
further
frustration, as it results in the loss of money, apart from time.

In addition
, keeping things tidy and clutter-free at both home and in the office provides one with a chance of leaving a long-lasting impression on others. The qualities, as mentioned earlier, are always linked to one’s personality, which is
continuously
being judged
by others. Neighbors and workplace colleagues always feel attracted to one that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keeps
their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
personal
belongings clean and
Consider replacing "in an orderly fashion" with the adverb for "orderly"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in an orderly fashion
. Based on such
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
qualities, one might be able to establish
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
terms with the surrounding neighbors or with bosses,
eventually
helping them succeed in both
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personal
and professional
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
.

In conclusion
, keeping belongings organized and neat saves one
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
and money.
Besides
, it
also
opens new doors for one to establish better relationships in both
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
personal
and professional capacities.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Human activities have led negative effects on plant and animals all over the world. Some people think it is too late to do something about it. Others think there is still some time to take actions. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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