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How to solve problem crime

How to solve problem crime AB6VM
In the past, crime is did not use to be a global issue, but in some places this is still true. However, nowaday's crime is reported everywhere. In this essay will be discussed and appropriate solutions are provided The first cause of the problem is low salary. For example, many people don't find a well-paid job, so many of them can commit robbery. The solution is for to government to provide active living, so that there will be less crime The second cause of the problem is bad behaviour friends For example, many of the friends commit robbery, because their parents can not bringing and don not give the right way for children. The solution is for to parents to be attentive, so that there will be better for their children future The third cause of the problem is watching Tv. For instance, some teenagers are spend to watch crime shows The solution is for the parents should control their children and limit the time of watching TV
In the past, crime is
Consider using a past participle here: "done".
did
not
Make sure that 'use to' is correct. For habitual actions in the past or to mean 'accustomed to', use "used to".
use to
be a global issue,
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but
in
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some
places this is
still
true.
However
,
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nowaday
's crime
is reported
everywhere. In this essay will
be discussed
and appropriate
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solutions
are
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
provided


The
first
cause of the problem is low salary.
For example
,
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many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
don't find a well-paid job,
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so
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many
of them can commit robbery. The
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solution
is for to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
to provide active living,
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so
that there will be less
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crime


The second cause of the problem is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
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behaviour
friends
For example
,
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many
of the friends commit robbery,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
their parents can not
The verb 'can' requires base form of the verb: "bring"
bringing
and
Did you mean "do not"?
don not
give the right way for children.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
The
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solution
is for to parents to be attentive,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that there will be better for their children
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
future


Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
The
third cause of the problem is watching
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Tv
.
For instance
,
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some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
teenagers
are
Consider using a past participle here: "spent".
spend
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
crime
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
solution
is for the parents should control their children and limit the time of watching
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
TV
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IELTS essay How to solve problem crime

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
167 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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