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How to become a good mother

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Becoming a good mother is the best " lofty job" and not a piece of cake. Nevertheless, you can become a good mother in the three following ways. The first thing I should mention is that cherishing the children unconditionally. There are many ways to treat with kindness and consideration like buying for them something they want, giving them the freedom to do something they love, . . . Nonetheless, all have to be controlled, not blinded. In addition, a good mother is a person giving them compliments when they achieve something even small things. That will make the kids feel proud of themself and more confident. Last but not least, moms should criticize the behavior of children, not children. When they treat wrongly, let's show their mistake by soft words but strict. You need to be serious but not angry in order that the kids don't feel hurt. To draw the conclusion, I can say that everyone can become a respectable mother with three tips I suggested.
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and not a piece of cake.
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, you can become a
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in the three following ways. The
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thing I should mention is that cherishing the children
unconditionally
. There are
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ways to treat with kindness and consideration like buying for them something they want, giving them the freedom to do something they
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be controlled
, not blinded.
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, a
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good
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mother
is a person giving them compliments when they achieve something even
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small
things. That will
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the kids feel proud of
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themself
and more confident. Last
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not least, moms should criticize the behavior of children, not children. When they treat
wrongly
,
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let
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show
their mistake by soft words
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strict. You need to be serious
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not angry in order that the kids don't feel hurt. To draw the conclusion, I can say that everyone can become a respectable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
mother
with three tips I suggested.

IELTS essay How to become a good mother

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
168 words
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