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How important is the dress code in our lives? Do you consider that dressing appropriately is important or are you of the opinion that everyone should be able to wear exactly what they like? v.3

How important is the dress code in our lives? Do you consider that dressing appropriately is important or are you of the opinion that everyone should be able to wear exactly what they like? v. 3
I agree that the dress code is very essential in all walks of life because one has to do this regularly. Since the ancient days, it is well understood that the quality of dressing plays a key role in a person's life. Let’s look at this in a detailed manner. Firstly, if we look at the needs, I could say people do different activities on a daily basis. For example, a man who works in an automotive mechanic shop may have to go to a school for his daughter's admission, or to attend a marriage function and numerous others. He needs to adapt to the occasion in hand, and he cannot wear the same repairman dress for a function. Secondly, dressing suitably has many advantages. For example, in our school, we used to wear uniforms which every child had to. This helped in keeping away the financial status among us. In another case, when you go for a business meeting, an immaculate dressing gives you extra confidence to represent your company in a forum. If you are on a party wear for a marriage function, it complements the occasion well. On the contrast, if you don't maintain a certain dress code, it might result in mishaps. When I went for a visa interview in last September, I got rejected albeit I answered all the questions reasonably well. The reason being I did not go in my best dressing. Those 2-3 minutes are hardy sufficient to judge a person whereas a perfect shirt and pants could have helped me to get over. In summary, dressing according to the occasion is a necessity. It adds value to you and it yields favourable results than when you are not. So, dress perfectly and half the battle is done.
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code is
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essential in all walks of life
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one
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has to
do this
regularly
. Since the ancient days, it is well understood that the quality of
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dressing
plays a key role in a person's life.
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Firstly
, if we look at the needs, I could say
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people
do
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different
activities on a daily basis.
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, a
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man
who works in an automotive mechanic shop may
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have to
go to a school for his daughter's admission, or to attend a marriage function and numerous others. He needs to adapt to the occasion in hand, and he cannot wear the same repairman
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dress
for a function.

Secondly
,
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dressing
suitably
has
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many
advantages.
For example
, in our school, we
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used
to wear uniforms which every child had to. This
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helped
in keeping away the financial status among us. In another case, when you go for a business meeting, an immaculate
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dressing
gives you extra confidence to represent your
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company
in a forum. If you are on a party wear for a marriage function, it complements the occasion well.

On the contrast, if you don't maintain a certain
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
dress
code, it might result in mishaps. When I went for a visa interview in last September, I
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got
rejected albeit I answered all the questions
reasonably
well. The reason being I did not go in my best
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dressing
. Those 2-3 minutes are hardy sufficient to judge a person whereas a perfect shirt and pants could have
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helped
me to
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get
over.

In summary,
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dressing
according to the occasion is a necessity. It
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adds
value to you and it yields
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favourable
results than when you are not.
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So
,
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dress
perfectly
and half the battle
is done
.
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2Mistakes

IELTS essay How important is the dress code in our lives? Do you consider that dressing appropriately is important or are you of the opinion that everyone should be able to wear exactly what they like? v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
295 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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