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How important is the dress code in our lives? Do you consider that dressing appropriately is important or are you of the opinion that everyone should be able to wear exactly what they like? v.1

How important is the dress code in our lives? Do you consider that dressing appropriately is important or are you of the opinion that everyone should be able to wear exactly what they like? v. 1
Whether dress code is important or not is a debate that is going for a long time. As far as I am concerned, I think the dress code is important and should be followed especially in schools and offices. The way person dresses up gives a lot of indications about their attitude and personality and therefore can sometimes make or break you. Firstly, having a dress code gives you the feeling of unity and togetherness. Many times having a dress code could make people forget their differences and work towards a common goal. For example, all the sports team and government organisations such as police and armed forces have same dress or uniform, which instils the feeling to being part of the team and working for a common goal. Many schools have dress codes, which is very vital to make the student understand that the in spite of differences in their cultural and financial background, they are equals and will only be evaluated based on merit. Dress codes are also important in offices, especially in customer facing roles. When a person interacts with the clients, he or she is representing the company and dressing appropriately is essential. Different companies have different styles of work which represented by their dress code. For instance, a financial institution generally has a formal dress code, since it gives the impression of being attentive and serious towards their work. Suppose if a person dresses in torn jeans with loose fitted T-shirt and loafers, I am sure clients would not be comfortable giving their money to such hands. Similarly, if you work in fashion industry, you are expected to be funky and experimental and not wear formal clothes. So, it is important to dress according to the profession you are in. In a nutshell, the “first impression is the last impression” and therefore, it is crucial that dress code is carefully chosen and followed.
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important
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a lot of
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therefore
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sometimes
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make
or break you.

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, having a
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dress
code gives you the feeling of unity and togetherness.
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Many
times having a
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dress
code could
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make
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people
forget their differences and
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work
towards a common goal.
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, all the sports team and
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government
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organisations
such as police and armed forces have same
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dress
or uniform, which
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instils
the feeling to being part of the team and working for a common goal.
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Many
schools have
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dress
codes, which is
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make
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in spite of
differences in their cultural and financial background, they are equals and will
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only
be evaluated
based on merit.

Dress codes are
also
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important
in offices,
especially
in customer facing roles. When a person interacts with the clients, he or she is representing the
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company
and dressing
appropriately
is essential.
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Different
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companies
have
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different
styles of
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work
which represented by their
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dress
code.
For instance
, a financial institution
generally
has a formal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
dress
code, since it gives the impression of being attentive and serious towards their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
. Suppose if a person
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dresses
in torn jeans with loose fitted T-shirt and loafers, I am sure clients would not be comfortable giving their money to such hands.
Similarly
, if you
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work
in fashion industry, you are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expected
to be funky and experimental and not wear formal clothes.
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So
, it is
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important
to
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dress
according to the profession you are in.

In a nutshell, the “
first
impression is the last impression” and
therefore
, it is crucial that
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dress
code is
carefully
chosen and followed.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay How important is the dress code in our lives? Do you consider that dressing appropriately is important or are you of the opinion that everyone should be able to wear exactly what they like? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
318 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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