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How important is the dress code in our lives? Do you consider that dressing appropriately is important or are you of the opinion that everyone should be able to wear exactly what they like? v.2

How important is the dress code in our lives? Do you consider that dressing appropriately is important or are you of the opinion that everyone should be able to wear exactly what they like? v. 2
There is no denying the fact that dressing plays a vital role in one’s physical appearance. To choose a proper dress is something of a dilemma to the public because they sometimes are confused. But nowadays people are becoming very conscious about choosing proper clothes appropriate to the situation. Whereas some people give priority to comfort or simplicity and choose casual wear often. Before rendering my opinion, I think it is necessary to take a glance at the arguments of both sides. According to the situation, generally, people choose traditional wear at festival time or at social events like marriage, party, birthday occasions etc. Sometimes, they choose to wear formal clothes with a suit at the working places or offices. Office wear represents professional approach towards work and creates a more realistic working environment. There are many organisations or companies prefer common dress for all their employees at working place. It develops certain moral values like unity, team spirit, etc. Modern business management strategies have accepted the importance of common dress code to create a better working environment. However, fashion trends also influence the people’s choice to select clothes. Especially youth is becoming more and more fashion conscious nowadays. In contrary, some people prefer to wear casual clothes or the clothes which make them comfortable. Generally, their preference is comfort over smartness. Meanwhile, some people are so simple by nature or they believe in simplicity and don’t give too much attention to recent fashion trends. In my opinion, I would prefer to wear clothes appropriate to the situation because time demands it. The main reason for my propensity for this is due to the fact that good appearance always creates a good impression. Summing up, I would say the choice of clothes depends on one’s lifestyle.
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choose
a proper dress is something of a dilemma to the public
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they
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sometimes
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.
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nowadays
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people
are becoming
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very
conscious about choosing proper
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clothes
appropriate to the situation. Whereas
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some
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people
give priority to comfort or simplicity and
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choose
casual
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wear
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often
.
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rendering my opinion, I
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think
it is necessary to take a glance at the arguments of both sides.

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generally
,
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people
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choose
traditional
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wear
at festival time or at social
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events
like marriage, party, birthday occasions etc.
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, they
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choose
to
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wear
formal
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clothes
with a suit at the
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working
places or offices. Office
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wear
represents professional approach towards work and creates a more realistic
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working
environment. There are
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many
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organisations
or
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companies
prefer common dress for all their employees at
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working
place. It develops certain moral values like unity, team spirit, etc. Modern business management strategies have
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accepted
the importance of common dress code to create a better
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working
environment.
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, fashion trends
also
influence the
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people’s
choice to select
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clothes
.
Especially
youth is becoming more and more fashion conscious nowadays.

In contrary,
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some
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people
prefer to
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wear
casual
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clothes
or the
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make
them comfortable.
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, their preference is comfort over smartness. Meanwhile,
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nature or
they believe in simplicity and don’t give too much attention to recent fashion trends.

In my opinion, I would prefer to
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wear
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clothes
appropriate to the situation
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because
time demands it. The main reason for my propensity for
this is due to the fact that
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good
appearance always creates a
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good
impression. Summing up, I would say the choice of
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clothes
depends on one’s lifestyle.
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27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay How important is the dress code in our lives? Do you consider that dressing appropriately is important or are you of the opinion that everyone should be able to wear exactly what they like? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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