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How do people address sports

How do people address sports NrjP2
Many people have contrasting views on the way they enjoy their favorite sport. Some people would rather stay home and watch sporting events on television while others like to enjoy the luxury of the live events excitement. Although both of these can be pleasant and convenient to different viewers/fans, in my point of view watching favorite sports on television is much more acceptable and convenient than watching them live in stadiums. On the one hand when people watch a live sport, they feel more excited. Being among other fans and spectators cheering and booing their teams can bring them an enjoyment beyond the excitement. They occasionally feel as if they are playing themselves in the field. In addition, watching live games can provide the fans this opportunity to have their favorite players' autograph along with some photos taken. However, it has its own particular drawbacks when lots of energy and money is going to be spent on watching live sporting events and it is deteriorated when some games are played somewhere out of home or hometown. On the other hand enjoying sporting events on television has its own pros and cons. The fans and viewers are no more in a rush buying tickets, taking the favorable seats, trying not to be late and so on so forth. In the other words, tournaments can be watched and followed relaxed staying home along with family members and friends with plenty of refreshments to maximize the pleasure of watching a sporting event. In sum, according to the old saying which says different strokes for different folks both of the choices can be favorable under various circumstances; but I still stick to my words and say, "stay home and watch it because home sweet home! " According to statistics the population of elderly people is enhancing the youths' and definitely it has some negative or positive aspects which affects the progress of societies directly and indirectly. In general, each country considers the youths as the main asset because they are the ones who can build the future of their countries; therefore investing on young people can be the best solution for society to progress in future. While it is expected in the future old people are going to outnumber young people in many countries. Do you feel this is a positive or negative development? /I have both negative and positive attitude toward this issue. On the one hand, the senior citizens in communities can play a vital role in different periods of youngsters' life by sharing their experiences, awareness and lots of other precious knowledge. Here young people can model after their old people in order to take right steps in life and avoid/deter making and repeating any mistakes they made before and this way a great amount of energy and money can be preserved not to be wasted. My old grandpa advised me over and over again not to waste my money on buying new cars every year; I never cared and now when I look back and see how much money I have wasted so far, I only regret. On the other hand outnumbering the elder people than the youths can has its own demerits/ shortcomings and enhance unemployment rate in societies because aging people are the ones who have been retired after working over 30 years and are no more in mood for working, so they always look tired and bored and look for their quiet solitude. Hence, this leads to new job opportunities not to be created and contributes unemployment and economic decline to be promoted. Above all life expectancy is in danger of fading in societies that the number of senior citizen is gradually increasing. Everybody is normally frightened of death and so the old people are; however, they always think of death and waiting for the day to say farewell to all. Maybe this feeling is induced to young people and make them think of death and its consequences unconsciously, that's why they no more effort to have progress in life and they feel in a rut and suffer from the monotony of life. Actually youngsters look young, but they aren't actually young within themselves. In a nutshell, in my point of view this phenomenon has more negative side effects to the societies; the positive aspects must not be neglected though. In spite of its numerous negative impacts, the young generation must take advantage of its positive pros in order to invigorate the quality of life.
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people
have contrasting views on the way they enjoy their favorite sport.
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people
would
rather
stay home and
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watch
sporting
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events
on television while others like to enjoy the luxury of the
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live
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events
excitement. Although both of these can be pleasant and convenient to
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different
viewers/fans, in my point of view watching favorite sports on television is much more acceptable and convenient than watching them
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live
in stadiums.

On the one
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hand
when
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people
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watch
a
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live
sport, they
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feel
more excited. Being among
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other
fans and spectators cheering and booing their teams can bring them an enjoyment beyond the excitement. They
occasionally
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feel
as if they are playing themselves in the field.
In addition
, watching
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live
games can provide the fans this opportunity to have their favorite players' autograph along with
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some
photos taken.
However
, it has its
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own
particular drawbacks when lots of energy and
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money
is going to
be spent
on watching
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live
sporting
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events
and it
is deteriorated
when
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some
games
are played
somewhere out of home or hometown.

On the
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other
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hand
enjoying sporting
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events
on television has its
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own
pros and cons. The fans and viewers are no more in a rush buying tickets, taking the favorable seats, trying not to be late and
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so
on
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so
forth. In the
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words, tournaments can be
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watched
and followed relaxed staying home along with family members and friends with
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plenty
of refreshments to maximize the pleasure of watching a sporting
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event
.

In sum, according to the
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old
saying which says
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different
strokes for
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different
folks both of the choices can be favorable under various circumstances;
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but
I
still
stick to my words and say,
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stay home and
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watch
it
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because
home sweet home!
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According to statistics the population of elderly
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people
is enhancing the youths' and definitely it has
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some
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negative
or
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positive
aspects which affects the progress of
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societies
directly
and
indirectly
.
In general
, each country considers the youths as the main asset
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because
they are the
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ones
who can build the future of their countries;
therefore
investing on
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young
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people
can be the best solution for
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society
to progress
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in future
.
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While
it is
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expected
in the future
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old
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people
are going to outnumber
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young
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people
in
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many
countries. Do you
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feel
this is a
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positive
or
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negative
development? /I have both
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negative
and
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positive
attitude toward this issue.

On the one
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hand
, the senior citizens in communities can play a vital role in
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different
periods of youngsters'
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life
by sharing their experiences, awareness and lots of
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other
precious knowledge. Here
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young
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people
can model after their
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old
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people
in order to take right steps in
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life
and avoid/deter making and repeating any mistakes they made
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before
and this way a great amount of energy and
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money
can
be preserved
not to
be wasted
. My
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old
grandpa advised me over and over again not to waste my
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money
on buying new cars every year; I never cared and
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now
when I
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look
back and
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see
how much
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money
I have wasted
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so
far, I
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only
regret.

On the
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other
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hand
outnumbering the elder
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people
than the youths can has its
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own
demerits/ shortcomings and enhance unemployment rate in
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societies
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because
aging
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people
are the
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ones
who have
been retired
after working over 30 years and are no more in mood for working,
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so
they always
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look
tired and bored and
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for their quiet solitude.
Hence
, this leads to new job opportunities not to
be created
and contributes unemployment and economic decline to
be promoted
.

Above all
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life
expectancy is in
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danger
of fading in
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societies
that the number of senior citizen is
gradually
increasing. Everybody is
normally
frightened of death and
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so
the
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old
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people
are;
however
, they always
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think
of death and waiting for the day to say farewell to all. Maybe this feeling
is induced
to
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young
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people
and
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make
them
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think
of death and its consequences
unconsciously
, that's why they no more effort to have progress in
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life and
they
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feel
in a rut and suffer from the monotony of
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life
. Actually youngsters
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look
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young
,
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but
they aren't actually
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young
within themselves.

In a nutshell, in my point of view this phenomenon has more
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negative
side effects to the
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societies
; the
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positive
aspects
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must
not
be neglected
though.
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In spite of
its numerous
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negative
impacts, the
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young
generation
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must
take advantage of its
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positive
pros in order to invigorate the quality of
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life
.
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IELTS essay How do people address sports

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