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How can we arouse desire to get educated among people

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Nowadays our world has been rapidly decreasing the amount of artists. Therefore, we are noticing that people are frequently changing their fields with new fields or trying to other degrees for example Engineering, MBA, Finance rather than following their passion. Government must support the artists to acquire knowledge in their field. This essay will argue that why it is essential to support artists. Due to low income of artists. They are requesting to the government to help them financially to have a good education of art. If government provide artists financial support then we will produce good artists. Also, which help to create new designs and good environment. I am completely agreed with that government should support painters to create color full cities. This fund encourage them to acquire knowledge in this field and also helpful for society. We observed that design roads, flyover and park are look more attractive than normal. However, if a country produce number of successful or well-known painters or artists then they can dominate their services to make beautiful world. Being paid low salaries we are lacking artists. In light of, financial support through government will lead a great roll and also the best movement to create a beautiful environment. It is fully worth to increase salary of painters and as well as help them financially. Hence, government needs to support painters, and they can make a movement for differently able person to get this knowledge while having this education they will play the best roles to growth of economic. This essay argued that, why it is necessary to administration spend or fixed amount which help artists. In my opinion, art field should be economically strong and well known field and need awareness also to play a key role in our society.
Nowadays our world has been
rapidly
decreasing the amount of
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artists
.
Therefore
, we are noticing that
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people
are
frequently
changing their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fields
with new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fields
or trying to other degrees
for example
Engineering, MBA, Finance
rather
than following their passion.
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Government
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must
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support
the
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artists
to acquire knowledge in their
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field
. This essay will argue that why it is essential to
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support
artists.

Due to low income of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
artists
. They are requesting to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
to
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help
them
financially
to have a
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good
education of art. If
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government
provide
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artists
financial
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support
then we will produce
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
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artists
.
Also
, which
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help
to create new designs and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
environment. I am completely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agreed
with that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
should
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
support
painters to create color full cities. This fund encourage them to acquire knowledge in this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
field
and
also
helpful for society. We observed that design roads, flyover and park are look more attractive than normal.

However
, if a country produce number of successful or well-known painters or
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
artists
then they can dominate their services to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
beautiful
world.
Being paid
low salaries we are lacking
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
artists
. In light of, financial
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
support
through
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
will lead a great roll and
also
the best movement to create a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
beautiful
environment. It is
fully
worth to increase salary of painters and
as well
as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
help
them
financially
.
Hence
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
needs to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
support
painters, and they can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a movement for
differently
able person to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
this knowledge while having this education they will play the best roles to growth of economic.

This essay argued that, why it is necessary to administration spend or
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fixed
amount which
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
help
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
artists
. In my opinion, art
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
field
should be
economically
strong and well known
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
field
and need awareness
also
to play a key role in our society.
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IELTS essay How can we arouse desire to get educated among people

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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