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Should school allow mobile phones for students?

Should school allow mobile phones for students? YBGaN
Mobile phones should be banned because it can bring distractions for both students and teachers. They won’t be able to complete their homework. It is easier for them to cheat during exams. Phones distracts students from studies. They will be busy scrolling through social media, texting, playing music or games. As a result, they are unable to learn. As said before, kids will be distracted and won’t pay attention during the classes. So, they won’t get their schoolwork done. This will result them into getting poorer grades and academic failure. Due to the addiction on mobile phones, kids will be unable to focus on their education. Therefore, they will end up cheating during the tests. They can easily store and search informations on phones. Mobile phones can negatively impact on kids. They will be quick to lose focus and get distracted easily. School is for getting education, not for playing mobile games.
Mobile phones should
be banned
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because
it can bring distractions for both students and teachers. They won’t be able to complete their homework. It is easier for them to cheat during exams.

Possible agreement error. You should probably use: "phone distracts".
Phones distracts
students from studies. They will be busy scrolling through social media, texting, playing music or games.
As a result
, they are unable to learn.

As said
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before
, kids will
be distracted
and won’t pay attention during the classes.
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So
, they won’t
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
their schoolwork done. This will result them into getting poorer grades and academic failure.

Due to the addiction on mobile phones, kids will be unable to focus on their education.
Therefore
, they will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
up cheating during the
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tests
. They can
easily
store and search
The word 'informations' is a legal term. In standard English, the word 'information' is a non-count noun. Did you mean "information"?
informations
on phones.

Mobile phones can
negatively
impact on kids. They will be quick to lose focus and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
distracted
easily
. School is for getting education, not for playing mobile games.
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IELTS essay Should school allow mobile phones for students?

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