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How bricks are produced. Overall, it is also noticeable that there are eight steps in the production of bricks, beginning with digging up of clay and finishing with delivering to customers.

How bricks are produced. Overall, it is also noticeable that there are eight steps in the production of bricks, beginning with digging up of clay and finishing with delivering to customers. jDY01
How bricks are produced. Overall, it is also noticeable that there are eight steps in the production of bricks, beginning with digging up of clay and finishing with delivering to customers. First of all, clay is dug up from the ground by a large digger. Then this clay is placed onto a metal grid, which is used to break the clay into small pieces. A roller assists in this process. At the next step, sand and water are added to the clay, and this mixture is turned into bricks by either placing it into a mould or using a wire cutter. Following this, these bricks are placed into an oven to dry for 2-3 days. After that, these bricks are heated in a kiln at moderate and then a high temperature (ranging from 200c to 1300c), followed by a cooling process in a chamber for 48-72 hours. Afterwards, the bricks are packed and finally delivered to their destinations.
How
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bricks
are produced
.
Overall
, it is
also
noticeable that there are eight steps in the production of
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bricks
, beginning with digging up of
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clay
and finishing with delivering to customers.

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First of all
,
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clay
is dug
up from the ground by a large digger. Then this
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clay
is placed
onto a metal grid, which is
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used
to break the
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clay
into
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small
pieces. A roller assists in this process.

At the
next
step, sand and water are
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added
to the
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clay
, and this mixture
is turned
into
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bricks
by either placing it into a
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mould
or using a wire cutter. Following this, these
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bricks
are placed
into an oven to dry for 2-3 days.

After that, these
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bricks
are heated
in a kiln at moderate and then a high temperature (ranging from 200c to 1300c), followed by a cooling process in a chamber for 48-72 hours. Afterwards, the
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bricks
are packed
and
finally
delivered to their destinations.
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IELTS essay How bricks are produced. Overall, it is also noticeable that there are eight steps in the production of bricks, beginning with digging up of clay and finishing with delivering to customers.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
158 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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