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Housing is essential for people. Some argue that the government should offer free housing for people who cannot afford it. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.2

Housing is essential for people. Some argue that the government should offer free housing for people who cannot afford it. v. 2
Housing is one of the basic necessities for people of any country and according to some, the government is ought to provide free shelter to the needy. In my opinion, I agree with this notion as this will greatly benefit the poor as they face many problems due to the lack of homes. A good reason to provide free housing to those below poverty line is that most are not able to fulfil the basic necessities of life. The per capita income in India, for instance, is quite low as compared to the western world and the poor are barely able to meet their requirements for food and clothing, and they deserve a helping hand from the government. Another reason to consider is that the exorbitant prices of property makes it infeasible for the needy to even think about buying a home. Moreover, with the growing population, there is an ever increasing demand for houses which puts an inflationary pressure on the prices, making them too high for the people below the poverty line. This further accentuates the need for the government to step in. Finally, the climatic conditions in many parts of the world make it miserable for the low income group. There are many deaths reported every year due to the extreme temperatures in many regions on the globe. Therefore, it is a must to have shelter homes for the needy. In conclusion, the living conditions of people below poverty line are quite difficult as they are not able to meet their basic necessities. The onus is on the government to offer free housing to them in order to help them survive.
Housing is one of the
Consider using "necessities".
basic necessities
for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
of any country and according to
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some
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
is ought to provide free shelter to the needy. In my opinion, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with this notion as this will
greatly
benefit the poor as they face
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
problems due to the lack of homes.

A
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
reason to provide free housing to those below poverty line is that most are not able to fulfil the
Consider using "necessities".
basic necessities
of life. The per capita income in India,
for instance
, is quite low as compared to the western world and the poor are
barely
able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
their requirements for food and clothing, and they deserve a helping hand from the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
.

Another reason to consider is that the exorbitant prices of property
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
it infeasible for the needy to even
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
about buying a home.
Moreover
, with the growing population, there is an
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
ever increasing
demand for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
houses
which puts an inflationary pressure on the prices, making them too high for the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
below the poverty line. This
further
accentuates the need for the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
to step in.

Finally
, the climatic conditions in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
parts of the world
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
it miserable for the low income group. There are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
deaths reported every year due to the extreme temperatures in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
regions on the globe.
Therefore
, it is a
After 'must', the verb is used without 'to'. Probably, you should use "must" or "have to" here.
must to
have shelter homes for the needy.

In conclusion
, the living conditions of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
below poverty line are quite difficult as they are not able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
their
Consider using "necessities".
basic necessities
. The onus is on the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
to offer free housing to them in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
them survive.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Housing is essential for people. Some argue that the government should offer free housing for people who cannot afford it. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
274 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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