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Some people believe that the problem of illegal drugs can be solved by just legalising all drugs. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this? v.1

Some people believe that the problem of illegal drugs can be solved by just legalising all drugs. with this? v. 1
The sale and consumption of drugs are illegal in almost all countries. Despite this, drugs are readily available from illegal dealers. They can even be bought online. Since illegal drugs have become quite a big problem, some people suggest that all forms of drugs should be legalised. I fully disagree with this view. Legalising all forms of drugs will only complicate the situation. If people can walk into a nearby store and buy cocaine or marijuana, there will be a dramatic increase in the number of drug addicts all over world. Drug abuse will be particularly rampant among young people. Obviously, any attempt to legalise all drugs will be the recipe for disaster. Of course, there are certain drugs with healing properties. For example, doctors sometimes prescribe marijuana to treat some health problems. Because of this reason, it is legal in some countries. Perhaps other countries too can legalise drugs with medical properties; however, before doing so they need to enact appropriate laws that will prevent the abuse of legalised drugs. Consumption of drugs leads to several health problems. That is the reason drugs are banned in most countries. Many people who consume drugs are actually unaware of the harmful consequences. They get into substance abuse when they are still in their teens and at this age they are too young to understand that drugs will ultimately destroy their life. For this reason, it is imperative that the government should launch massive campaigns to create awareness about the harmful side effects of drugs. These campaigns should primarily target teens and youngsters. The government must also enact laws that give stringent punishment to drug dealers. In conclusion, illegal drugs have become a major problem all over the world; however, legalizing them is not the solution. Instead, the government should come down hard on drug dealers. It must also create awareness about the harmful effects of drug addiction
The sale and consumption of
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drugs
are
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illegal
in almost all
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countries
. Despite this,
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drugs
are
readily
available from
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illegal
dealers. They can even be
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bought
online. Since
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illegal
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drugs
have become quite a
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big
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problem
,
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some
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people
suggest that all forms of
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drugs
should be
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legalised
. I
fully
disagree with this view.

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all forms of
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drugs
will
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only
complicate the situation. If
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people
can walk into a nearby store and
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buy
cocaine or marijuana, there will be a dramatic increase in the number of
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drug
addicts all over world.
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Drug
abuse will be
particularly
rampant among young
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people
.
Obviously
, any attempt to
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legalise
all
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drugs
will be the recipe for disaster.

Of course
, there are certain
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drugs
with healing properties.
For example
, doctors
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sometimes
prescribe marijuana to treat
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some
health
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problems
.
Because of this
reason, it is legal in
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some
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countries
. Perhaps other
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countries
too can
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legalise
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drugs
with medical properties;
however
,
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before
doing
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so
they need to enact appropriate laws that will
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prevent
the abuse of
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legalised
drugs.

Consumption of
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drugs
leads to several health
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problems
.
That is
the reason
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drugs
are banned
in most
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countries
.
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Many
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people
who consume
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drugs
are actually unaware of the harmful consequences. They
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get
into substance abuse when they are
still
in their teens and at this age they are too young to understand that
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drugs
will
ultimately
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destroy
their life.
For this reason
, it is imperative that the
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government
should launch massive campaigns to create awareness about the harmful side effects of
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drugs
. These campaigns should
primarily
target teens and youngsters. The
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government
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must
also
enact laws that give stringent punishment to
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drug
dealers.

In conclusion
,
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illegal
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drugs
have become a major
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problem
all over the world;
however
,
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legalizing
them is not the solution.
Instead
, the
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government
should
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come
down
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hard
on
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drug
dealers. It
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must
also
create awareness about the harmful effects of
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drug
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addiction
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people believe that the problem of illegal drugs can be solved by just legalising all drugs. with this? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
315 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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