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Holidays in our country - Uzbekistan

Holidays in our country - Uzbekistan m30k8
Uzbek people celebrate the Independence Day on the first of September. This year we celebrated the tenth anniversary of the independence. Besides we have the New Year’s Day on the first of January. Usually we welcome the New Year’s Day with our family and friends. On this day we give presents to all the family and make merry. There are some other holidays in our country. On the eighth of December we celebrate the Constitution Day. There are also two Moslem holidays: “Ramadan Khait” and “Kurban Khait”. The dates of these holidays change each year. On the eighth of March we celebrate Women’s Day. On that day we congratulate our mothers and sisters. The best present for women is flower. In spring on the twenty first of March Uzbek people celebrate Navruz – the eastern New Year. A week before the holiday people of Uzbekistan take part in a republican khashar (collective unpaid work). Money earned on that day is donated to the Navruz fund. During this holiday women cook palau, shashlik, naryn, khasyp and manty. But the most important dish of the holiday is Sumalak, a high calorie stew of germinated wheat. Navruz is a holiday of mercy, on this day people forgive one another and visit lonely and disable people. Families with many children and old people receive gifts and money. On this day streets and squares of towns and villages of Uzbekistan are decorated and full of music and songs. One of the greatest holidays we celebrate on the ninth of May – the Victory Day. On that day all countries which fought together against the fascists celebrate the victory over the fascist Germany in May 1945. We also honour those who were killed during the Second World War.
Uzbek
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celebrate
the Independence Day on the
first
of September. This
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year
we celebrated the tenth anniversary of the independence.

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Besides
we have the New
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Year’s
Day on the
first
of January.
Usually
we welcome the New
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Year’s
Day with our family and friends. On this day we give presents to all the family and
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make
merry.

There are
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some
other
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holidays
in our country. On the eighth of December we
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celebrate
the Constitution Day. There are
also
two
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Moslem
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holidays
: “Ramadan
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Khait
” and “
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Kurban
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Khait
”. The dates of these
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holidays
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change
each year.

On the eighth of March we
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celebrate
Women’s Day. On that day we congratulate our mothers and sisters. The best present for women is flower.

In spring on the twenty
first
of March Uzbek
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people
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Navruz
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–
the eastern New
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Year
. A week
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before
the
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holiday
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people
of Uzbekistan
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take part
in a republican
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khashar
(collective unpaid work). Money earned on that day
is donated
to the
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Navruz
fund.

During this
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holiday
women cook
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palau
,
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shashlik
,
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naryn
,
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khasyp
and
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manty
.
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But
the most
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important
dish of the
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holiday
is
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Sumalak
, a high calorie stew of germinated wheat.

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Navruz
is a
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holiday
of mercy, on this day
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people
forgive one another and visit lonely and disable
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people
. Families with
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many
children and
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old
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people
receive gifts and money.

On this day streets and squares of towns and villages of Uzbekistan
are decorated
and full of music and songs.

One of the greatest
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holidays
we
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celebrate
on the ninth of May
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–
the Victory Day. On that day all countries which fought together against the fascists
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celebrate
the victory over the fascist Germany in May 1945. We
also
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honour
those who
were killed
during the Second World War.
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IELTS essay Holidays in our country - Uzbekistan

Essay
  American English
9 paragraphs
292 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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