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Nowadays shopping is not only about buying the good you need, is is also perceived as entertainment

Nowadays shopping is not only about buying the good you need, is is also perceived as entertainment 0EKb3
Nowadays in the developed countries have been developing a new form of entertainment: shopping. But is this a good attitude towards purchasing? According to a recent survey over 80pc of people coming from Europe used to buy new things just to spend some time. Let’s discover the main causes of this behaviour. The first cause are the advertisements. Most people is induced to buy useless stuff because attracted by the low price of those products, so the people think to do a deal buying this stuff, but this end up to spend almost three thousands euros per year.
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developed countries
have been developing a new form of entertainment: shopping.
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is this a
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good
attitude towards purchasing? According to a recent survey over 80pc of
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people
coming from Europe
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used
to
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buy
new things
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to spend
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some
time.
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’s discover the main causes of this
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behaviour
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first
cause are the advertisements. Most
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people
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is
induced to
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buy
useless stuff
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because
attracted by the low price of those products,
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so
the
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people
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think
to do a deal buying this stuff,
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this
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up to spend almost three thousands euros per year.

IELTS essay Nowadays shopping is not only about buying the good you need, is is also perceived as entertainment

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
98 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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