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In recent eras, aging has become a concern with people all around the world. Some individuals are willing to continue their job even after having reached their retirement age. While there are several drawbacks of this aspect, I believe that its benefits are outweigh those detrimental effects. On the one hand, continuing to work despite having reached retirement age has some adverse consequences on elderly. From general perspective, this phenomenon can lead to an undesirably more competitive employment market. For instance, elderly candidates, who have more hands-on experience, compete with younger one for their position of employment can lead to the age discrimination in one organization. If a considerable number of works are taken accountability by the seniors, there will be fewer opportunities for young generation who want to have stay able job and chance to make advance in working. As a result, numerous of youngster must leave off their job. However, in spite of the drawbacks, the advantages of the allowing elderly people to continue their career should be noticeable. From individuals level, continuing to work after their limited age is an appropriate opportunity for elderly to improve their mental health and prevent from disease. To be specific, working can help their brains active positively consequently that they can prevent from some problems relevant to brain disorders such as Alzheimer, which can lead to a better retire life. For family’s benefit, elderly can make a contribution to family’s finance, which decrease the heavy of finance burden for their kids. This typical situation has become familiar with some family indeveloping countries such as Vietnam, where kids depend on their parental support in money to work or caring their children. In conclusion, although this phenomenon may bring pressure on working environment, it has beneficial consequences for both individuals and their family insome situation.
In recent eras, aging has become a concern with
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people
all around the world.
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Some


individuals are willing to continue their job even after having reached their retirement

age. While there are several drawbacks of this aspect, I believe that its benefits are

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outweigh
those detrimental effects.

On the one hand, continuing to work despite having reached retirement age has
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some


adverse consequences on
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elderly
. From general perspective, this phenomenon can lead to an
undesirably
more competitive employment market.
For instance
, elderly

candidates, who have more hands-on experience, compete with younger one for their

position of employment can lead to the age discrimination in one organization. If a

considerable number of works
are taken
accountability by the seniors, there will be

fewer opportunities for young generation who want to have
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stay
able job and chance to
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make
advance in working.
As a result
, numerous of youngster
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must
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leave
off their job.

However
,
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in spite of
the drawbacks, the advantages of the allowing
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elderly
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people
to continue their career should be noticeable. From individuals level, continuing to work

after their limited age is an appropriate opportunity for
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elderly
to
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improve
their mental

health and
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prevent
from disease. To be specific, working can
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help
their brains active

positively
consequently
that they can
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prevent
from
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some
problems relevant to brain disorders such as Alzheimer, which can lead to a better retire life. For
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family’s
benefit,
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elderly
can
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make
a contribution to
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family’s
finance, which decrease the heavy of finance burden for their kids. This typical situation has become familiar with
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some
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family
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indeveloping
countries such as Vietnam, where kids depend on their parental support in money to work or caring their children.

In conclusion
, although this phenomenon may bring pressure on working environment, it has beneficial consequences for both individuals and their
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family
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insome
situation.
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IELTS essay hello nice to meet you im not a robot for u

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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