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Hello, I am Ramandeep. I called you today for IELTS writing and speaking evaluation.

The materialistic possessions, assets and social stature of an individual are the most judged things in the modern time. This essay agrees that what moral values a person bears are of little importance hen I comes to socializing. This essay ill explore the reason for why are these social parameters profound phenomenon amongst people for judging and secondly, I will define what I believe what should considerate when it comes to social interaction. Firstly, in this present era of bustling lifestyle where everyone is in great hurry of achieving materialistic goals, there is a little time for spiritual values. People are so involved in themselves with an aura of self centered targets of acquiring more and more money leaves less room for moral and beliefs. Ethics of trust, warm heartedness, kindness, love empathy, compassion is widely missing. As people themselves indulged in the process of possession of wealth, they have large tendency to seek these qualities for outside world thereby knitting the likewise social fabric. The very idea of more money means more luxury and henceforth more easy and accessible life are the gold standards for living a successful life. Therefore they want same set of people around who are having greater assets by not giving a little care for ethical and overall character of an individual. In addition to it, this quality of the people raises an alarming question for a healthy society as not everyone is economically sound and as a result of it, these poor people left aside as a deprived group of social sittings. This give rise to the rich/poor/middle/higher class and hundred percent contribution to social discrimination. To conclude this, I believe one should keep in mind that we all are human and compassion is the element which constitutes our soul. A high moral character is bear by those who have love for the mankind and these should be the standard of the society in order to make sound social structure.
The materialistic possessions, assets and
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social
stature of an individual are the most judged things in the modern time. This essay
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agrees
that what moral values a person bears are of
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little
importance hen I
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comes
to socializing. This essay ill explore the reason for why are these
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social
parameters profound phenomenon amongst
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people
for judging and
secondly
, I will define what I believe what should considerate when it
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comes
to
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social
interaction.

Firstly
, in this present era of bustling lifestyle where everyone is in great hurry of achieving materialistic goals, there is a
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little
time for spiritual values.
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People
are
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so
involved in themselves with an aura of
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self centered
targets of acquiring more and more money
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leaves
less room for moral and beliefs. Ethics of trust,
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warm heartedness
, kindness,
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love
empathy, compassion is
widely
missing. As
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people
themselves indulged in the process of possession of wealth, they have large tendency to seek these qualities for outside world thereby knitting the
likewise
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social
fabric. The
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very
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idea
of more money means more luxury and henceforth more easy and accessible life are the gold standards for living a successful life.
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Therefore
they want same set of
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people
around who are having greater assets by not giving a
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little
care for ethical and
overall
character of an individual.

In addition
to it, this quality of the
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people
raises an alarming question for a healthy society as not everyone is
economically
sound and
as a result
of it, these poor
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people
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left
aside as a deprived group of
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social
sittings. This give rise to the rich/poor/middle/higher
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class
and
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hundred
percent contribution to
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social
discrimination.

To conclude
this, I believe one should
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keep
in mind that we all are human and compassion is the element which constitutes our soul. A high moral character is bear by those who have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
for the mankind and these should be the standard of the society in order to
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make
sound
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social
structure.
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IELTS essay Hello, I am Ramandeep. I called you today for IELTS writing and speaking evaluation.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
326 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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