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People often think about creating an ideal society, but most of the times fail in making this happen. What is your opinion about an ideal society How can we create an ideal society?

How wonderful would it be to live in an ideal society, where everybody would be smiling, helping each other and trying their best to maintain peace and harmony. Speaking about this idea is more or less like watching and narrating a science fiction movie. Although it may sound perfect, the whole concept is almost certain that it will not happen. Many people have been preaching and doing the most they can, so it we can achieve it, unfortunately there is too much badness in mankind. It is and will be impossible for the living to obtain harmony or this so called ideal society if each and every country making guns, nuclear bombs and such firepower. These tools are not meant for making peace, these are the first and last things which could start and end wars. Making the whole idea work should be beneficial for most of the people, unless if somebody is a warlord, gang member, head of the mafia or even the politician. My idea to get on the path towards the ideal society, would require a universal language, so we can understand each other. To learn more about each other’s culture so we can understand what is happening in other countries and why is it happening. Best of all would be to taste specialities in different regions of the world, because one thing is for sure, one flavour could tell a million stories about the place and the culture of the people. In my opinion, these are a few of many ideas that should be in the spotlight and to start with, for us to be able to create a better place for our own good. The chances of this happening are almost equal to null, but still hoping that one day we will be there.
How wonderful would it be to
live
in an ideal society, where everybody would be smiling, helping each
other
and trying their best to maintain peace and harmony.

Speaking about this
idea
is more or less like watching and narrating a science fiction movie. Although it may sound perfect, the whole concept is almost certain that it will not happen.
Many
people
have been preaching and doing the most they can,
so
it we can achieve it, unfortunately there is too much badness in mankind. It is and will be impossible for the living to obtain harmony or this
so called
ideal society if each and every country making guns, nuclear bombs and such firepower. These tools are not meant for making peace, these are the
first
and last things which could
start
and
end
wars.

Making the whole
idea
work should be beneficial for most of the
people
, unless if somebody is a warlord, gang member, head of the mafia or even the politician.

My
idea
to
get
on the path towards the ideal society, would require a universal language,
so
we can understand each
other
. To learn more about each
other’s
culture
so
we can understand what is happening in
other
countries and why is it happening. Best of all would be to taste specialities in
different
regions of the world,
because
one thing is for sure, one
flavour
could
tell
a million stories about the place and the culture of the
people
.

In my opinion, these are a few of
many
ideas
that should be in the spotlight and to
start
with, for us to be able to create a better place for our
own
good
. The chances of this happening are almost equal to null,
but
still
hoping that one day we will be there.
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IELTS essay People often think about creating an ideal society, but most of the times fail in making this happen. What is your opinion about an ideal society How can we create an ideal society?

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