Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

he government should focus on upgrading the railway system rather than using money for roads one

he government should focus on upgrading the railway system rather than using money for roads one aEKEX
It is common belief that the government should focus on upgrading the railway system rather than using money for roads one. I personally agree with the viewpoint as the following. To begin with, there are several reasons why people are in favor of spending the country's budget to invest in the railway system. First and foremost, the railways are much more better than roads one in terms of safety and affordability for both passengers and drivers. For instance, the number of roads and highway accidents are higher than that of railways accidents. Secondly, with the application of cutting-edge technology, bullet trains have emerged and become more popular in various countries leading to a great amount of time-saving for citizens. Moreover, the train can contain wide range of people and hundreds of tonnes of goods which will reduce traffic congestion and also cut back on the carbon emission from private vehicles. Needless to say, the train is one of the environmentally-friendly modes of transportation which is an essential part of our lives to reverse the process of global warming. Last but not least, because of the spectacular growth in the world's population, expanding faster and more reliably is better than investing in the older transportation system. From what has been discussed above, I hold my position that government, whether in a developed or developing country, should be encouraged to invest their budget into new sustainable transportation such as railways rather than roads.
It is common belief that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should focus on upgrading the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
railway
system
rather
than using money for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
roads
one. I
personally
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with the viewpoint as the following.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with, there are several reasons why
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are in favor of spending the country's budget to invest in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
railway
system.
First
and foremost, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
railways
are much
Use only "better" (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
more better
than
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
roads
one in terms of safety and affordability for both passengers and drivers.
For instance
, the number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
roads
and highway accidents are higher than that of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
railways
accidents.
Secondly
, with the application of cutting-edge technology, bullet trains have emerged and become more popular in various countries leading to a great amount of time-saving for citizens.

Moreover
, the train can contain wide range of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
and hundreds of tonnes of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
which will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
traffic congestion and
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cut
back on the carbon emission from private vehicles. Needless to say, the train is one of the
environmentally
-friendly modes of transportation which is an essential part of our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
to reverse the process of global warming. Last
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
not least,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of the spectacular growth in the world's population, expanding faster and more
reliably
is better than investing in the older transportation system.

From what has
been discussed
above, I hold my position that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
, whether in a developed or
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
developing country
, should
be encouraged
to invest their budget into new sustainable transportation such as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
railways
rather
than
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
roads
.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay he government should focus on upgrading the railway system rather than using money for roads one

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
241 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts