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Having more money and less free time is better than earning less money and having more free time. Discuss both views and state your opinion. v.9

Having more money and less free time is better than earning less money and having more free time. v. 9
Luxurious life is the dream of every individual in today time. Everyone is running behind the money. It has been observed that some people wish to earn more money instead of spending free time and others like to enjoy more free time rather than earning money. I will discuss both the views in upcoming paragraph. On one hand, there are people who earn more penny and spend less quality time with their loved ones. Financial stability is the main focus behind their work. They can spend a comfortable life. Quality education can be imparted to the kids. They can give top-notch health facilities to their near and dear ones. For instance, famous businessman, celebrities are financially capable of buying items without looking at the price tag. On the other hand, some people like to give their valuable time to family, home and to themselves instead of running behind the money. They are satisfied with what they have. The feelings they share with their loved ones are priceless. Giving time to themselves to make them healthy. Some people like to enhance their hobby in their free time. It makes them physically as well as mentally relax. They can inculcate good moral values in their kids by spending quality time with them. To conclude, spending time and earning money are good, but to some limit. Caring about your loved once and sharing your experience in free time is also essential. In my opinion, earning money and giving time to your near ones is the need of the day. They need financial as well as moral support to live a happy and healthy life.
Luxurious life is the dream of every individual in
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today
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time
. Everyone is running behind the
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money
. It has
been observed
that
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some
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people
wish to earn more
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money
instead
of spending
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free
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time
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and others
like to enjoy more
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free
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time
rather
than earning
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money
. I will discuss both the views in upcoming paragraph.

On one hand, there are
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people
who earn more penny and spend less quality
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time
with their
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loved
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ones
. Financial stability is the main focus behind their work. They can spend a comfortable life. Quality education can
be imparted
to the kids. They can give top-notch health facilities to their near and dear
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ones
.
For instance
,
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famous
businessman, celebrities are
financially
capable of buying items without looking at the price tag.

On the other hand
,
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some
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people
like to give their valuable
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time
to family, home and to themselves
instead
of running behind the
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money
. They
are satisfied
with what they have. The feelings they share with their
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loved
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ones
are priceless. Giving
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time
to themselves to
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make
them healthy.
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Some
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people
like to enhance their hobby in their
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free
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time
. It
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makes
them
physically
as well
as mentally relax. They can inculcate
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good
moral values in their kids by spending quality
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time
with them.

To conclude
, spending
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time
and earning
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money
are
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good
,
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but
to
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some
limit. Caring about your
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loved
once and sharing your experience in
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free
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time
is
also
essential. In my opinion, earning
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money
and giving
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time
to your near
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ones
is the need of the day. They need financial
as well
as moral support to
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live
a happy and healthy life.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Having more money and less free time is better than earning less money and having more free time. v. 9

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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