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Growing population pros and cons

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As gun violence has been increasing in society for the last few decades, it is often argued that gun ownership should not be allowed to common people. I support this view to a large extent since this may prevent getting the deadly weapons into the wrong hands. This essay will support my views and give a proper conclusion at the end. The one main reasons are if guns were used by mentally challenged or criminals, the repercussions would be tremendous. Because of the ownership, this allows the owner to use firearms for self -defence. However, currently, the opposite is true: there are many gun violence incidents in the USA, where keeping a licenced firearm is very normal, for example. Since many culprits fire against innocents in order to escape from crime scenes. Secondly, freedom of gun ownership is outdated when mankind at risk of being attacked. In other words, rarely do we see a country with a free gun policy is peaceful, and many sociologists have been requesting to the world leaders to stop issuing a gun licence to citizens. Although it may argue that the piece of equipment also uses for entertainment, mostly this may not be the case. To illustrate this, even young school children shoot at their classmates with their parents’ pistols, so the depth of the issue is so evident. In conclusion, I firmly support prohibiting access to guns to citizens as it is essential to save the lives of innocent people. It is predicted that if possession of guns did not control, it would kill thousands of humans.
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violence has been increasing in society for the last few decades, it is
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argued that
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ownership should not be
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people
. I support this view to a large extent since this may
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prevent
getting the deadly weapons into the
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hands. This essay will support my views and give a proper conclusion at the
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end
.

The one main reasons are if
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guns
were
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by mentally challenged or criminals, the repercussions would be tremendous.
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of the ownership, this
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allows
the owner to
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use
firearms for self
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-defence
.
However
,
currently
, the opposite is true: there are
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many
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violence incidents in the USA, where keeping a
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licenced
firearm is
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very
normal,
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Since
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culprits fire against innocents in order to escape from crime scenes.

Secondly
, freedom of
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ownership
is outdated
when mankind at
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risk
of
being attacked
.
In other words
, rarely do we
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see
a country with a free
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gun
policy is peaceful, and
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many
sociologists have been requesting to the world leaders to
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stop
issuing a
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gun
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licence
to citizens. Although it may argue that the piece of equipment
also
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uses
for entertainment,
mostly
this may not be the case. To illustrate this, even young school children shoot at their classmates with their parents’ pistols,
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so
the depth of the issue is
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so
evident.

In conclusion
, I
firmly
support prohibiting access to
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guns
to citizens as it is essential to save the
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lives
of innocent
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people
. It
is predicted
that if possession of
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guns
did not control, it would kill thousands of humans.
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IELTS essay Growing population pros and cons

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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