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Describe an activity that you do after your study and work

Describe an activity that you do after your study and work 2rVEx

Honestly, due to my both study and work pressure I have busy schedule. So after getting tired I want to relax my self by going out side for evening walk. Most of the time I go to village park with my friend because of the peaceful atmosphere. I do walk on grass, do some comfortable exercises and talk to each other. Moreover, there is river near park where I do boating sometime. Which is also a active which helps to heal my stress. Sometimes when the weather is awesome I take books with me and read in the part by sitting near river's bank.

Honestly
, due to my both study and work pressure I have busy schedule. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
So
 after getting tired I want to relax my self by going Did you mean "outside"?outside
out side
 for evening walk. Most of the time I go to village park with my friend This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 of the peaceful atmosphere. I do walk on grass, do This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 comfortable exercises and talk to each other. Moreover
, there is river near park where I The usual collocation for an activity ending in "-ing" is "go" not "do" or "play." Revise: "go boating".go boating
do boating
 sometime. “Which” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Which
 is also
Use "an" instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'an
a
 active which This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assists
helps
 to heal my This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accentuate
stress
. This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :in some instances
Sometimes
 when the weather is awesome I take books with me and read in the part by sitting near river's bank. 

IELTS essay Describe an activity that you do after your study and work

Essay

American English

1 paragraphs

104 words

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4.0

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
Include an introduction and conclusion
Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.0

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Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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