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Groups or organizations are an important part of some people’s lives. Why are groups or organizations important to people? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer. v.2

Groups or organizations are an important part of some people’s lives. Why are groups or organizations important to people? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer. v. 2
According to some people, the authorities should invest in trains instead of roadways. I do not quite agree with this view. In my opinion, the roads are as important as railways and hence the government should allocate appropriate funding for both. There are certainly ample reasons to spend taxpayer’s money on railways. Trains can carry more people. Also, they are eco-friendly. Unlike cars or buses they do not emit poisonous gases which pollute the air. Another advantage of using trains is that they do not get stuck in traffic. People can reach their destinations on time. Trains also tend to be faster and safer. Better still, in most countries around the world, train fares are considerably lower than bus fares or taxi fares. On the flip side, roads are equally important. The construction of railways is not possible in certain geographical areas and in such places, roads is the only mode of transport for people. Also, rail networks cannot reach every nook and corner of a country. Actually, most people use both roads and railways to commute to college or work. For example, they may take the bus or car to reach the railway station and from there they may take the train to reach their office. If there are no roads or if the existing roads are in a pathetic condition, people will have trouble reaching their destinations. In conclusion, roadways and railways are both essential for making travelling hassle free for people. Hence, I do not agree with the argument that the government should invest more in railways. Rather, it should give equal importance to both modes of transport.
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trains
instead
of roadways. I do not quite
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agree
with this view. In my opinion, the
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roads
are as
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important
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railways
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government
should allocate appropriate funding for both.

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certainly
ample reasons to spend taxpayer’s money on
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railways
.
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Trains
can carry more
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people
.
Also
, they are eco-friendly. Unlike cars or buses they do not emit poisonous gases which pollute the air. Another advantage of using
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trains
is that they do not
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get
stuck in traffic.
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People
can
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reach
their destinations on time.
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Trains
also
tend to be faster and safer. Better
still
, in most countries around the world,
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train
fares are
considerably
lower than bus fares or taxi fares.

On the flip side,
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roads
are
equally
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important
. The construction of
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railways
is not possible in certain geographical areas and in such places,
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roads
is the
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mode of transport for
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people
.
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, rail networks cannot
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reach
every nook and corner of a country. Actually, most
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people
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use
both
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roads
and
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railways
to commute to college or work.
For example
, they may take the bus or car to
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reach
the
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railway
station and from there they may take the
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train
to
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reach
their office. If there are no
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roads
or if the existing
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roads
are in a pathetic condition,
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people
will have trouble reaching their destinations.

In conclusion
, roadways and
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railways
are both essential for making travelling hassle free for
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people
.
Hence
, I do not
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agree
with the argument that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should invest more in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
railways
.
Rather
, it should give equal importance to both modes of transport.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Groups or organizations are an important part of some people’s lives. Why are groups or organizations important to people? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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