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Crime can never be stopped.agree diagree?

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It is often argued that, a lot of people believe nothing can be done to prevent crimes, which is a big problem in the world. This essay disagrees that there is no solution to stop offenders. Firstly, by teaching practical skills and secondly, through rehabilitation transformation can be expected. First of all, Government should provide professional neuro-psychologists to the inmates who give them rehabilitation therapy. They could find the root cause of the violation and provide solution. Solutions must be a way to discourage criminals from committing further crimes. While, these therapies can only be provided to inmates who have committed low key misdemeanours like petty theft, shoplifting, etc, criminals who have committed serious felonies like rapes, murders must be denied leniency. For example, the article in New York Times, regarding, "reasons for criminals reoffending to return back to prison " show that 75% of inmates have no shelter, therefore, they recommit the crime to return back to prison for shelter and food. In such conditions authorities should provide them with shelters and check up on them regularly by the probation officer mist be made mandatory. Secondly, Authorities must appoint teaching staff who teach practical life skills that would empower them and enable them to work, when they rejoin society. In other words, Government can organize classes that teach skills the inmates are interested in and encourage them to live a decent life. For example, Prisoners in Finland are given qn opportunity to study the course they like, they are taught university level courses, entrepreneurship courses, etc; they are also provided with library facilities to direct them towards a better life. To conclude, despite the belief that nothing can be done to prevent crimes, Government must be forefront in giving medical aid and teaching skills that would maybe reduce crimes to some extent.
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a lot of
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people
believe nothing can
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prevent
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crimes
, which is a
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big
problem in the world. This essay disagrees that there is no solution to
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stop
offenders.
Firstly
, by teaching practical
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skills
and
secondly
, through rehabilitation transformation can be
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expected
.

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,
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Government
should provide professional
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neuro-psychologists
to the
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inmates
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who
give them rehabilitation therapy. They could find the root cause of the violation and provide solution. Solutions
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must
be a way to discourage criminals from committing
further
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crimes
. While, these therapies can
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only
be provided
to
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inmates
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who
have committed
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low key
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misdemeanours
like petty theft, shoplifting, etc, criminals
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who
have committed serious felonies like rapes, murders
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must
be denied
leniency.
For example
, the article in New York Times, regarding,
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reasons for criminals
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reoffending
to
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return back
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show
that 75% of
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inmates
have no shelter,
therefore
, they recommit the
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crime
to
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return back
to prison for shelter and food. In such conditions authorities should provide them with shelters and
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check
up on them
regularly
by the probation officer mist
be made
mandatory.

Secondly
, Authorities
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appoint teaching staff
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who
teach practical life
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skills
that would empower them and enable them to work, when they rejoin society.
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,
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Government
can organize classes that teach
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skills
the
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inmates
are interested
in and encourage them to
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live
a decent life.
For example
, Prisoners in Finland are
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opportunity to study the course they like, they
are taught
university level courses, entrepreneurship courses, etc; they are
also
provided with library facilities to direct them towards a better life.

To conclude
, despite the belief that nothing can
be done
to
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prevent
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crimes
,
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Government
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must
be forefront in giving medical aid and teaching
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skills
that would maybe
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reduce
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crimes
to
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some
extent.
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IELTS essay Crime can never be stopped. agree diagree?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
303 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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