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GOVERNMNETS SHOULD SPEND MONEY ON RAILWAYS RATHER THAN ROADS TO WHAT EXTEBD DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE WITH THIS STATEMNET

GOVERNMNETS SHOULD SPEND MONEY ON RAILWAYS RATHER THAN ROADS TO WHAT EXTEBD WITH THIS STATEMNET 6anWB
There are different modes of transport used by various people all over the world, So government had provided many facilities in modes of transport besides that some people argue that many funds should be spend on railways rather than roadways. On the one hand the railways should be developed because there are many benefits in that they are time saving, efficient and economically accepted and afforded by maximum population and gives an tired less experience besides these things the tickets are cheaper than large buses and road transport. For example while people are travelling through road for a long time could get tired or get a back pain as there are many other issues traffic and all over speed breakers and others but in trains they provide a greater comfort to all and a good travel experience. On the other hand spending money on road transport improvement has many drawback as roads may get damaged frequently for rains or other natural disasters whereas railroads stand for a long life. For example if a city is affected by flood the bridges and roads may get cracks and get damaged so to renovate them again many money will be required instead of that railways provide a longer life of things and a safer journey when compared to roads. To conclude that government should concentrate on railways as most of them would prefer this mode of transport more that roadways, As roadways are less safer and high cost when compared to railways. Spending on railways is seems to be a wiser thing rather spending on road transport.
There are
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modes of
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used
by various
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people
all over the world,
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So
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government
had provided
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many
facilities in modes of
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besides
that
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some
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people
argue that
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many
funds should be
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spend
on
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railways
rather
than roadways.

On the one hand the
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railways
should
be developed
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because
there are
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many
benefits in that they are time saving, efficient and
economically
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accepted
and afforded by maximum population and gives
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an
tired less experience
besides
these things the tickets are cheaper than large buses and
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road
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transport
.
For example
while
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people
are travelling through
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road
for a long time could
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get
tired or
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get
a back pain as there are
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many
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other
issues traffic and all over speed breakers
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and others
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but
in trains they provide a greater comfort to all and a
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good
travel experience.

On the
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other
hand spending money on
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road
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transport
improvement has
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many drawback
as
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roads
may
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get
damaged
frequently
for rains or
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other
natural disasters whereas railroads stand for a long life.
For example
if a city is
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affected
by flood the bridges and
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roads
may
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get
cracks and
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get
damaged
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so
to renovate them again
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many money
will
be required
instead
of that
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railways
provide a longer life of things and a safer journey when compared to roads.

To conclude
that
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government
should concentrate on
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railways
as most of them would prefer this mode of
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transport
more that roadways, As roadways are
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less safer
and high cost when compared to
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railways
. Spending on
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railways
is seems to be a wiser thing
rather
spending on
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road
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transport
.
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IELTS essay GOVERNMNETS SHOULD SPEND MONEY ON RAILWAYS RATHER THAN ROADS TO WHAT EXTEBD WITH THIS STATEMNET

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  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
6.0
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