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Governments should tax private car owners heavily

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Nowadays, more and more people own at least a car. It indicates that the citizens’ finances are increasing, and people have a better life. However, that development has caused many traffic problems. Some people believe that the Vietnamese government should have a heavy tax on private cars owners and use the money to improve public transportation. This such a solution has both benefits and drawbacks. On the one hand, the number of cars will decrease if the car owners have to pay a high rate tax. Consequently, the authority can use the fund to improve public transportation systems and facilities. Secondly, the number of accidents and injuries of automobile vehicles would go down because of having fewer means of transportation. In addition, the budget for public vehicles fuel could be reduced and the air pollution could become decreasingly. On the other hand, it is a big problem for people who live in the countryside or rural areas. Although public transportation may reach their place, it has once or twice a day. In this case, they can save plenty of time by using their private car. Besides the inconvenience, since the quality of car consumption declines, many automobile companies would reduce employment. As a result, both the government and the citizens would face unemployment issues. In conclusion, every solution has positive and negative sides, giving high rate tax for private vehicle owners is not an exception. That way could reduce air pollution, upgrade the public transportation facilities. However, society has to solve a new problem that is unemployment.
Nowadays, more and more
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people
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own
at least a
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car
. It indicates that the citizens’ finances are increasing, and
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people
have a better life.
However
, that development has caused
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many
traffic problems.
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Some
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people
believe that the Vietnamese
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government
should have a heavy tax on private
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cars
owners and
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use
the money to
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improve
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public
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transportation
. This such a solution has both benefits and drawbacks.

On the one hand, the number of
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cars
will decrease if the
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car
owners
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have to
pay a high rate tax.
Consequently
, the authority can
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use
the fund to
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improve
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public
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transportation
systems and facilities.
Secondly
, the number of accidents and injuries of automobile vehicles would go down
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because
of having fewer means of
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transportation
.
In addition
, the budget for
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public
vehicles fuel could be
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reduced
and the air pollution could become
decreasingly
.

On the other hand
, it is a
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big
problem for
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people
who
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live
in the countryside or rural areas. Although
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public
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transportation
may reach their place, it has once or twice a day.
In this case
, they can save
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plenty
of time by using their private
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car
.
Besides
the inconvenience, since the quality of
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car
consumption declines,
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many
automobile
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companies
would
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reduce
employment.
As a result
, both the
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government
and the citizens would face unemployment issues.

In conclusion
, every solution has
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positive
and
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negative
sides, giving high rate tax for private vehicle owners is not an exception. That way could
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reduce
air pollution, upgrade the
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public
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transportation
facilities.
However
, society
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has to
solve a new problem
that is
unemployment.
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IELTS essay Governments should tax private car owners heavily

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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