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Governments should support their athletes

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In this modern world characterized by its complexity and sophistication, governments' policies play a significant role in people's prosperity and quality of life. Some believe the advantages of spending money in support of athletics outweigh spending money on arts. But some hold the opposite opinion. Governments should support and esteem their athletes such as Olympic ones, owing to, they bring worldwide reputations for their country, and encourage people to have a healthy and athletic lifestyle. Allocating more budget for athletics gives rise to better reputation in the world for countries. Good reputation among countries has always been a remarkable benefit for governments. However, by training good athletes to gain more gold medals in international competitions, coutries can improve their reputations far easier. We are witnessing in well-developed countries, governments put huge importance on their athletes, and provide many facilities for them to shine in international competitions like Olympics to attain better reputation among other countries. Some years ago, athlets of my country, Iran, got the number one position in wrestling. When I went to Europe last year, and people asked me where I am from, I proudly answered from Iran, and they told me that we know your country because of your remarkable results in wrestling competitions. Furthermore, people, by following athletic programs on TV are encouraged more to sports. People's health has always been a concern for governments. However, Governments can courage people to sport and have a healthy lifestyle, by spending more money on supporting athletics on TV, social media, etc. Last year, during Japan Olympic, my mother, by seeing our women's swimming Olympic team, was encouraged to swim more seriously, and now her lifestyle has changed so positively. Governments should advocate athletics and prioritize it for spending money, due to it brings sheer benefits for countries. I hope we all with facilities that our governments provide for us, live good and have positive impact on our society.
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spending
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money
in support of athletics outweigh
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spending
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money
on arts.
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some
hold the opposite opinion.
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Governments
should support and esteem their
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athletes
such as Olympic ones, owing to, they bring worldwide
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reputations
for their
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country
, and encourage
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people
to have a healthy and
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athletic
lifestyle.

Allocating more budget for athletics gives rise to better
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reputation
in the world for
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countries
.
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Good
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reputation
among
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has always been a remarkable benefit for
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governments
.
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, by training
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good
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athletes
to gain more gold medals in international competitions,
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far easier. We are witnessing in well-developed
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,
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governments
put huge importance on their
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athletes
, and provide
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many
facilities for them to shine in international competitions like Olympics to attain better
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reputation
among other
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countries
.
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years ago,
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athlets
of my
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, Iran,
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the number one position in wrestling. When I went to Europe last year, and
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people
asked me where I am from, I
proudly
answered from Iran, and they
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me that we know your
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of your remarkable results in wrestling competitions.

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,
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programs on TV
are encouraged
more to sports.
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's health has always been a concern for
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people
to sport and have a healthy lifestyle, by
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more
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money
on supporting athletics on TV, social media, etc. Last year, during Japan Olympic, my mother, by seeing our women's swimming Olympic team,
was encouraged
to swim more
seriously
, and
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now
her lifestyle has
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changed
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so
positively
.

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Governments
should advocate athletics and prioritize it for
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spending
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money
, due to it brings sheer benefits for
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countries
. I hope we all with facilities that our
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governments
provide for us,
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live
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good
and have
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positive
impact on our society.
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IELTS essay Governments should support their athletes

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
320 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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