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Governments should spend more money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.7

Governments should spend more money on railways rather than roads. v. 7
The most common mode of transportation among people are railways and roadways, because it’s convenient for them to reach their destination. However, the public has a concern that government must expend money on the railways than on roadways. Indeed, I agree with this viewpoint because of various reasons. Firstly, the trains are a cheaper mode of commuters than roadways, and it is available to people at the right time. Moreover, the public does not face any congestion by travelling on trains that most of road users experience. Therefore, they will spend less time in travelling and reach their destination at a faster pace. Furthermore, it is one of the safest modes of travel than road transport. However, thousands of people are travelling by trains on a daily basis, like the super-fast express, faster trains, metros, local trains and trams to get to their places. On the other hand, by investing more on the enhancements of railways the traffic and pollution gets controlled and other environmental problems can be solved. Moreover, the roadway construction causes more damage to the society and public. For example, in my area the road extension is going to take place in a few months, due to this many shops, complexes and houses are being destroyed by the government which is a huge loss to people. Furthermore, the number of road accidents occurring has been increasing day by day due to various reasons. In order to avoid these, the cabinet should increase and improve railways, because when compared to railways casualties the highway casualties are higher. Although roads are connecting many remote areas, when heavy rains or wind occurs the roadways gets blocked and water gets stagnated, due to which people cannot travel to such places, so railways lines must be laid. To conclude, the government must always invest on safer, faster and cheaper modes of commuters, the railways and also introduce new trains, so that people can have an easy and convenient journey.
The most common
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of transportation among
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people
are
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railways
and
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roadways
,
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because
it’s convenient for them to reach their destination.
However
, the public has a concern that
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government
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must
expend money on the
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railways
than on
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roadways
.
Indeed
, I
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agree
with this viewpoint
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because
of various reasons.

Firstly
, the
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trains
are a cheaper
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mode
of commuters than
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roadways
, and it is available to
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people
at the right time.
Moreover
, the public does not face any congestion by travelling on
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trains
that most of
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road
users experience.
Therefore
, they will spend less time in travelling and reach their destination at a faster pace.
Furthermore
, it is one of the safest
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modes
of travel than
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road
transport.
However
, thousands of
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people
are travelling by
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trains
on a daily basis, like the super-
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fast
express, faster
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trains
, metros, local
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trains
and trams to
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get
to their places.

On the other hand
, by investing more on the enhancements of
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railways
the traffic and pollution
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gets
controlled and other environmental problems can
be solved
.
Moreover
, the
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roadway
construction causes more damage to the society and public.
For example
, in my area the
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road
extension is going to take place in a few months, due to this
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many
shops, complexes and
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houses
are being
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destroyed
by the
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government
which is a huge loss to
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people
.
Furthermore
, the number of
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road
accidents occurring has been increasing day by day due to various reasons. In order to avoid these, the cabinet should increase and
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improve
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railways
,
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because
when compared to
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railways
casualties the highway casualties are higher. Although
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roads
are connecting
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many
remote areas, when heavy rains or wind occurs the
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roadways
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gets
blocked and water
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gets
stagnated, due to which
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people
cannot travel to such places,
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so
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railways
lines
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must
be laid
.

To conclude
, the
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government
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must
always invest on safer, faster and cheaper
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modes
of commuters, the
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railways
and
also
introduce new
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trains
,
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so
that
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people
can have an easy and convenient journey.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Governments should spend more money on railways rather than roads. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
327 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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