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Governments should spend money on railways ratherthan roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.2

Governments should spend money on railways ratherthan roads. with this statement? v. 2
There is an ongoing controversy argument that whether governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. Some people think that road is more suitable than railways. However, in my opinion, I believe that spending money on railways can make more benefit than use it for roads for several reasons. First, train is the cheaper way to travel the car or bus. People should get the valuable public transport with the minimum cost and the government should provide the sufficient support for people. Because a train can carry more than a hundred people, it is one of the most economical transportation. For instance, in my country, the train cost only 5 pounds to travel from Bangkok to Chiangmai, compared to the bus, which cost 12 pounds. Clearly, the train is the low-price transportation than road vehicle, so the governments should invest on railways more to ensure that people in their countries get the reasonable public transportation. Second, the railways’ system emit less pollution than the other transport in roads’ system. Nowadays, most cars still need oil to make to possible move. Consequently, the carbon that was produced from the car engines will damage the environment and harm the living creatures. In contrast, the trains can use other clean energy, such as electricity, to propel the train instead of oil. This innovation reduces the significant level of environment problems that humans are now terrified. So the government ought to persuade people to use this clean technology by spending more money on the railways, rather than the roads. In conclusion, investing on railways contributes more benefits on roads. It brings the cheaper way of transportation and causes less pollution to the environment. I believe that the world will be better if the governments invest more on the railways.
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think
that
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road
is more suitable than
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railways
can
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make
more benefit than
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use
it for
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for several reasons.

First
,
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train
is the cheaper way to travel the car or bus.
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People
should
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get
the valuable public transport with the minimum cost and the
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government
should provide the sufficient support for
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people
.
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Because
a
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train
can carry more than a hundred
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people
, it is one of the most economical
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transportation
.
For instance
, in my country, the
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train
cost
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5 pounds
to travel from Bangkok to
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Chiangmai
, compared to the bus, which cost
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12 pounds
.
Clearly
, the
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train
is the low-price transportation than
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road
vehicle,
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so
the
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governments
should invest on
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railways
more to ensure that
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people
in their countries
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get
the reasonable public transportation.

Second, the
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railways’
system emit less pollution than the other transport in
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roads’
system. Nowadays, most cars
still
need oil to
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make
to possible
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move
.
Consequently
, the carbon that
was produced
from the car engines will damage the environment and harm the living creatures.
In contrast
, the
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trains
can
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use
other clean energy, such as electricity, to propel the
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train
instead
of oil. This innovation
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reduces
the significant level of environment problems that humans are
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now
terrified.
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So
the
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government
ought to persuade
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people
to
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use
this clean technology by spending more money on the
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railways
,
rather
than the roads.

In conclusion
, investing on
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railways
contributes more benefits on
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roads
. It brings the cheaper way of transportation and causes less pollution to the environment. I believe that the world will be better if the
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governments
invest more on the
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railways
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Governments should spend money on railways ratherthan roads. with this statement? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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