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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement. v.30

Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement. v. 30
It is true that developing transport instruction includes railways and roads is crucial for an economics. While I accept that railway system bring so much benefit, I believe that the decision to focus on building railways or roads of a country based on many factors and a government has to consider the benefit of each system for the whole economics in short and long-term. On the one hand, there a variety of reasons why railway systems should be built widely and went throughout a country. One reason is that transporting goods by train in the safest way. Thanks to these features such as using rails to move and we can control train schedule so accidents rarely can happen. Furthermore, one of the biggest advantages is the volume of goods can be carried at one time. Obviously that trains can carry tens or even hundreds times as much volume as a truck can. This feature help companies save transportation cost and from that increase profit. On the other hand, depend on many factors, the advantages of road system can outweigh railways. Firstly, besides saving cost, flexibility also is a competitive advantage of a company. However, in many cases, railways cannot be built in a specific region due to geographical problems while that problem can be solved by using a truck. Secondly, the roads will be more effective than railways in short distance. For example, if you want to deliver the goods in the inner city or next provinces, using a motorcycle or truck will be more convenient and save time. In conclusion, it is certainly true that railway systems bring a huge benefit for a country, but this is no by means it always effective. So, an investment decision on whether railways or roads should be considered carefully
It is true that developing transport instruction includes
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railways
and
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roads
is crucial for an economics. While I accept that
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railway
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system
bring
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so
much benefit, I believe that the decision to focus on building
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railways
or
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roads
of a country based on
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many
factors and a
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government
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has to
consider the benefit of each
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system
for the whole economics in short and long-term.

On the one hand, there a variety of reasons why
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railway
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systems
should
be built
widely
and went throughout a country. One reason is that transporting
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
by train in the safest way. Thanks to these features such as using rails to
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move and
we can control train schedule
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
accidents rarely can happen.
Furthermore
, one of the biggest advantages is the volume of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
can
be carried
at one time.
Obviously
that trains can carry tens or even hundreds times as much volume as a truck can. This feature
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
save transportation cost and from that increase profit.

On the other hand
, depend on
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many
factors, the advantages of
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road
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system
can outweigh
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railways
.
Firstly
,
besides
saving cost, flexibility
also
is a competitive advantage of a
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company
.
However
, in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
cases,
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railways
cannot
be built
in a specific region due to geographical problems while that problem can
be solved
by using a truck.
Secondly
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
roads
will be more effective than
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railways
in short distance.
For example
, if you want to deliver the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
in the inner city or
next
provinces, using a motorcycle or truck will be more convenient and save time.

In conclusion
, it is
certainly
true that
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railway
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
systems
bring a huge benefit for a country,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
this is no by means it always effective.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, an investment decision on whether
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railways
or
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
roads
should
be considered
carefully
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement. v. 30

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
9
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 9.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 9.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 9.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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