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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or or disagree? v.23

Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. v. 23
Budget allocation by the government in the public transportation is widely debated, with some people claiming that government should invest more money in railways, while others proclaim that roads should be given more importance. In my opinion, I completely agree that, railways should be given importance because they are faster and pollution free. To embark on, there are many reasons why the government should spend more money on railways. Firstly, railways is faster than road transportation, because trains go at a speed of 300 to 500 kilometres per hour easily, whereas for cars and buses it is nearly impossible due to the traffic on the roads. For instance, bullet trains in Japan can accelerate to 300 km/HR within a span of one minute. Secondly, trains can accommodate more people than the other means of transportation with varying options such as reservation, A. C and general coach. Furthermore, railways are cheaper than roads, which can be easily affordable by all sections of the society. Finally, trains generate a very less amount of pollution when compared to the road transportation. Nowadays, due to the modern inventions, most of the locomotives run with the help electricity instead of fossil fuels. For example, metro trains in India are fully automatic and they are electrically driven and emits zero carbon dioxide. Conversely vehicles which run on roads produce enormous amounts of carbon dioxide and chlorofluorocarbons which in turn leads to depletion of the ozone layer and causes global warming. To conclude, as railway transit is faster, secure and pollution free, so government should concentrate on developing railway transit by investing more money rather than road transportation.
Budget allocation by the
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government
in the public
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transportation
is
widely
debated, with
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some
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people
claiming that
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government
should invest more money in
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railways
, while others proclaim that
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roads
should be
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given
more importance. In my opinion, I completely
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agree
that,
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railways
should be
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given
importance
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because
they are faster and pollution free.

To embark on, there are
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many
reasons why the
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government
should spend more money on
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railways
.
Firstly
,
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railways
is faster than
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road
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transportation
,
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because
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trains
go at a speed of 300 to 500
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kilometres
per hour
easily
, whereas for cars and buses it is
nearly
impossible due to the traffic on the
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roads
.
For instance
, bullet
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trains
in Japan can accelerate to 300 km/HR within a span of one minute.
Secondly
,
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trains
can accommodate more
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people
than the other means of
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transportation
with varying options such as reservation, A. C and general coach.
Furthermore
,
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railways
are cheaper than
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roads
, which can be
easily
affordable by all sections of the society.

Finally
,
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trains
generate a
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very
less amount of pollution when compared to the
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road
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transportation
. Nowadays, due to the modern inventions, most of the locomotives run with the
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help
electricity
instead
of fossil fuels.
For example
, metro
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trains
in India are
fully
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
automatic and
they are
electrically
driven and emits zero carbon dioxide.
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Conversely
vehicles which run on
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roads
produce enormous amounts of carbon dioxide and chlorofluorocarbons which in turn leads to depletion of the ozone layer and causes global warming.

To conclude
, as
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railway
transit is faster, secure and pollution free,
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so
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government
should concentrate on developing
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railway
transit by investing more money
rather
than
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road
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transportation
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. v. 23

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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