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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.22

Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement? v. 22
Introduction: It is believed for governments that investment in the railways is more advisable than roads. This essay strongly agrees with this opinion and justifications are as follows. Primarily, travelling by train is extremely safer than by any other means of ground transportation. As an explanation, trains ride on the railways, this means that there are no other vehicles travelling on its way, leading to a significantly lower chance of accidents than cars, buses, which are driven on roads. Therefore, by improving railways, governments will provide a safe system and encourage people to use trains for transportation more, which will result in a decrease in the accident rate in the nation. For example, statistics from a scientific report have shown that the number of crashes caused by trains is remarkably less than that of buses, cars, motorbikes. In addition to this, improvements on railroads will also reduce air pollution. To be specific, it is known that traffic jams and traffic lights are the most significant factors causing high consumption of fuel for road travelling automobiles. Nonetheless, this is not the case for travelling on the railways. This implies that travelling by trains will reduce the emission of poisonous gases into the atmosphere of the cities. As a result, by upgrading the system, governments could attract people to use this method to travel more, leading to a potential drop in air pollution. For instance, measurements in a city where people have been shifting to travelling by this way has shown improved air quality. Conclusion: In summary, it is agreed that money should be spent on railways instead of roads due to the benefits in travel safety and environment protection. Thus, it can be predicted that there would be more trains in the future.
Introduction: It
is believed
for
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governments
that investment in the
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railways
is more advisable than
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roads
. This essay
strongly
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agrees
with this opinion and justifications are as follows.

Primarily
,
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travelling
by
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train
is
extremely
safer than by any other means of ground transportation. As an explanation,
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trains
ride on the
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railways
, this means that there are no other vehicles
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travelling
on its way, leading to a
significantly
lower chance of accidents than cars, buses, which
are driven
on
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roads
.
Therefore
, by improving
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railways
,
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governments
will provide a safe system and encourage
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people
to
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use
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trains
for transportation more, which will result in a decrease in the accident rate in the nation.
For example
, statistics from a scientific report have shown that the number of crashes caused by
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trains
is
remarkably
less than that of buses, cars, motorbikes.

In addition
to this, improvements on railroads will
also
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reduce
air pollution. To be specific, it
is known
that traffic jams and traffic lights are the most significant factors causing high consumption of fuel for
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road
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travelling
automobiles. Nonetheless, this is not the case for
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travelling
on the
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railways
.
This implies that
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travelling
by
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trains
will
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reduce
the emission of poisonous gases into the atmosphere of the cities.
As a result
, by upgrading the system,
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governments
could attract
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
this method to travel more, leading to a potential drop in air pollution.
For instance
, measurements in a city where
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
have been shifting to
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travelling
by this way has shown
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improved
air quality.

Conclusion: In summary, it is
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agreed
that money should
be spent
on
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railways
instead
of
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roads
due to the benefits in travel safety and environment protection.
Thus
, it can
be predicted
that there would be more
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trains
in the future.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement? v. 22

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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