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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.21

Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement? v. 21
Implementing proper mode of Public transportation is main challenge for any government. While some people think that government should invest in rails, others are of the opinion that government should spend more money on roads. As per my point of view, it is more advantageous to improve railways than road. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in following paragraphs. To begin with, investing in railways is a good idea as the services are faster, cheaper and convenient so it is afforded by maximum people. It is the best mode of transportation to commute around the city, as it does not face any traffic congestion like the road user experience. Trains are faster than any vehicle on the road and if this service is made better, then more people will travel by train as it will take less time to reach the destination. Railways are the best mode of transportation for both commuting inside the city as well as for travelling to other cities. For instance, travelling from Gujarat to Delhi by road use to take around 20 hours, but as the government as introduced the bullet train now it only takes 3 hours to reach Delhi. Therefore, it saves a lot of time in travelling and people can be more productive during those hours. In addition to this, the cost for upgrading the rails is much less compared to the roads. Moreover, using trains also proves to be beneficial for our environment. As a train carry hundreds of people around the city, the number of people travelling with vehicles reduces which in turn reduces the carbon dioxide emitted. This is the main advantage for the nation as it improves the carbon level and helps to protect nature. As per a recent research, opening the underground metro in Delhi as resulted in 40% less production of carbon dioxide as compared to data from before metro. To conclude, the government should properly plan for the future and as railways offer more convenience than road transportation does, it deserves more budget.
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transportation
is main challenge for any
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government
. While
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some
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people
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think
that
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government
should invest in rails, others are of the opinion that
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government
should spend more money on
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roads
. As per my point of view, it is more advantageous to
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improve
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railways
than
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road
. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in following paragraphs.

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begin
with, investing in
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railways
is a
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good
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idea
as the services are faster, cheaper and convenient
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so
it
is afforded
by maximum
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people
. It is the best mode of
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transportation
to commute around the city, as it does not face any traffic congestion like the
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road
user experience.
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Trains
are faster than any vehicle on the
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road
and if this service
is made
better, then more
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people
will travel by
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train
as it will take less time to reach the destination.
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Railways
are the best mode of
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transportation
for both commuting inside the city
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as well as
for
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travelling
to other
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cities
.
For instance
,
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travelling
from Gujarat to Delhi by
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road
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use
to take around 20 hours,
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but
as the
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government
as introduced the bullet
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train
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now
it
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only
takes 3 hours to reach Delhi.
Therefore
, it saves
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a lot of
time in
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travelling
and
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people
can be more productive during those hours.
In addition
to this, the cost for upgrading the rails is much less compared to the roads.

Moreover
, using
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trains
also
proves to be beneficial for our environment. As a
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train
carry hundreds of
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people
around the city, the number of
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people
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travelling
with vehicles
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reduces
which in turn
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reduces
the carbon dioxide emitted. This is the main advantage for the nation as it
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improves
the carbon level and
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helps
to protect nature. As per a recent research, opening the underground metro in Delhi as resulted in 40% less production of carbon dioxide as compared to data from
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before
metro.

To conclude
, the
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government
should
properly
plan for the future and as
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railways
offer more convenience than
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road
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transportation
does, it deserves more budget.
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IELTS essay Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement? v. 21

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
344 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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