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Governments make rules to protect people from danger, for example by making people wear seat belts in cars or not allowing smoking in public buildings. However, many people believe there are too many rules nowadays. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

It is often argued that there are a lot of restrictions these days by the government; however, the government puts hindrances for the protection of the public from various casualties like put seat belts while driving and to prohibit smoking at community places. Personally, I disagree with the idea that government should not make rules and regulations because I believe that these are only the benefits for these people who do not like it. On the one hand, I agree that freedom is necessary and everyone likes it. People want to lead their lives as per as they want. Many people like to smoke, and they consider smoking in a luxurious and impressive way. They think that with smoking they can impress others. Likewise, they do not like to wear seatbelts because it distracts them, and they do not want to wear them. In this way, people feel the restrictions as a burden on them, and they want to get rid of them, and they dislike it. Nevertheless, I believe that restrictions are only for the safety purpose, so that’s why government impose them. Firstly, smoking is not good for health; it causes lung cancer, so government controls it with the help of certain laws. Secondly, seat belts are necessary to save people from accidents on the roads. That’s why government fine people who break these rules; they set a different number of penalties to stop them to break the rules. In conclusion, while freedom gives people happiness, but if it is not good for their well being then it needs to be regulated with certain rules.
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argued that there are
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a lot of
restrictions these days by the
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government
;
however
, the
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government
puts hindrances for the protection of the public from various casualties like put seat belts while driving and to prohibit
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smoking
at community places.
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, I disagree with the
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idea
that
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government
should not
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make
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rules
and regulations
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because
I believe that these are
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only
the benefits for these
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people
who do not like it.

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agree
that freedom is necessary and everyone likes it.
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People
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want
to lead their
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lives
as per as they
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want
.
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Many
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people
like to smoke, and they consider
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smoking
in a luxurious and impressive way. They
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think
that with
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smoking
they can impress others.
Likewise
, they do not like to wear seatbelts
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because
it distracts them, and they do not
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want
to wear them. In this way,
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people
feel the restrictions as a burden on them, and they
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want
to
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get
rid of them, and they dislike it.

Nevertheless
, I believe that restrictions are
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only
for the safety purpose,
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so
that’s why
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government
impose them.
Firstly
,
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smoking
is not
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good
for health; it causes lung cancer,
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so
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government
controls it with the
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help
of certain laws.
Secondly
, seat belts are necessary to save
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people
from accidents on the roads. That’s why
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government
fine
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people
who break these
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rules
; they set a
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different
number of penalties to
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stop
them to break the
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rules
.

In conclusion
, while freedom gives
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people
happiness,
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but
if it is not
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good
for their
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well being
then it needs to
be regulated
with certain
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rules
.

IELTS essay Governments make rules to protect people from danger, for example by making people wear seat belts in cars or not allowing smoking in public buildings. However, many people believe there are too many rules nowadays.

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267 words
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