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Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.9

Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement? v. 9
During earlier times, railway network was run mostly for long distances. Governments started building better roads and so called highways linking big cities and spending most of the money on road development. Railways have been in the hindsight ever since road transportation has become more favourable for many people. Railways should have a wider area of network in any country. Governments should make sure they make the connectivity better as it is safer and faster than roads. As per statistics, road accidents occur much more frequently than railways leading to higher fatality rate. A train carries a lot more passengers and luggage than roads. A train is less polluting than all the cars or buses required for transporting the same number of passengers. In bigger cities, a train can reduce the time taken to travel significantly as vehicular traffic causes disruption during office hours. Trains are a quicker and safer option in terms of health and environment, meaning railways should be considered as a better mode of transport than roads. Roads are essential for small distances within a city. Road transport is more convenient as people can do stoppages anytime they want. They do not have to buy tickets well in advance during holiday seasons. There is no overcrowding like on trains and they can choose their convenient time to leave from the starting point. Railway network should be more established and well-connected than roads. The government should spend more money improving the frequency of trains and improving the hygiene for the passengers as well. Thereby avoiding overcrowding and make it more adjustable to people’s needs. Roads being more dangerous in terms of fatality rate should be put as a secondary option compared to railways. Railways should be considered for the better safety of the passengers, environmentally friendly and less time consuming.
During earlier
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times
,
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railway
network
was run
mostly
for long distances.
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Governments
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started
building
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better
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roads
and
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so called
highways linking
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big
cities and spending most of the money on
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road
development.
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Railways
have been in the hindsight ever since
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road
transportation has become more
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favourable
for
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many
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people
.

Railways should have a wider area of network in any country.
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Governments
should
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make
sure they
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make
the connectivity
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better
as it is safer and faster than
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roads
. As per statistics,
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road
accidents occur much more
frequently
than
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railways
leading to higher fatality rate. A
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train
carries a lot more
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passengers
and luggage than
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roads
. A
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train
is less polluting than all the cars or buses required for transporting the same number of
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passengers
. In bigger cities, a
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train
can
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reduce
the
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time
taken to travel
significantly
as vehicular traffic causes disruption during office hours.
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Trains
are a quicker and safer option in terms of health and environment, meaning
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railways
should
be considered
as a
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better
mode of transport than roads.

Roads are essential for
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small
distances within a city.
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Road
transport is more convenient as
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people
can do stoppages anytime they want. They do not
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have to
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buy
tickets well in advance during holiday seasons. There is no overcrowding like on
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trains and
they can choose their convenient
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time
to
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leave
from the starting point.

Railway network should be more established and well-connected than
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roads
. The
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government
should spend more money improving the frequency of
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trains
and improving the hygiene for the
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passengers
as well
. Thereby avoiding overcrowding and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
it more adjustable to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
’s needs.
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Roads
being more
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dangerous
in terms of fatality rate should
be put
as a secondary option compared to
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railways
.
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Railways
should
be considered
for the
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better
safety of the
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passengers
,
environmentally
friendly and less
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time consuming
.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement? v. 9

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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