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government should build train and subway line to reduce traffic jam others however believe that building more and wider roads is a better way to reduce the traffic jam

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Nowadays, it is true that traffic congestion is a serious problem for most countries in the world, especially developing countries. It is argued by some people that the most effective solution to tackle this problem is by building train or subway lines. However, I personally believe that a better method is extending more and wider roads. On the one hand, there are a number of reasons why some people believe that constructing train or subway routes is the best way. The first reason is train and subway lines can carry a huge number of passengers in the same time in comparing with cars or bus. If many people opt to using these means of transport It could limit private vehicles which might help to curb traffic jam. Another reason is that building new train and subway lines means there will be likely numerous of people to choose them to commute which leads to less traffic congestion. On the other hand, I would argue that it would be very effective if government builds more and wider roads. These days, there has been increasing number of people tend to use their own cars instead of choosing a public transport due to its comfort and convenience. Therefore, it is unwise if they invest money on constructing train and subway routes to address the traffic jams. Furthermore, a certain of residents would use newly built roads and as a result is reducing traffic jams on the old roads. Finally, with wider roads, it would have to create more space, consequently it helps easily circulate during peak hours. In conclusion, although building train and subway lines can alleviate the volume of traffic. It seems to me that, extending roads is a better choice
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congestion is a serious problem for most countries in the world,
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developing countries
. It
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some
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people
that the most effective solution to tackle this problem is by building
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train
or
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subway
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lines
.
However
, I
personally
believe that a better method is extending more and wider roads.

On the one hand, there are a number of reasons why
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some
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people
believe that constructing
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train
or
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subway
routes is the best way. The
first
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train
and
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subway
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lines
can carry a huge number of passengers in the same time in comparing with cars or bus.
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opt to using these means of transport It could limit private vehicles which might
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help
to curb
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jam. Another reason is that building new
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train
and
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subway
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lines
means there will be likely numerous of
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people
to choose them to commute which leads to less
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traffic
congestion.

On the other hand
, I would argue that it would be
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very
effective if
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government
builds more and wider
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roads
. These days, there has been increasing number of
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people
tend to
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use
their
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own
cars
instead
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Therefore
, it is unwise if they invest money on constructing
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train
and
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subway
routes to address the
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traffic
jams.
Furthermore
, a certain of residents would
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use
newly
built
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roads
and
as a result
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traffic
jams on the
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old
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roads
.
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, it would
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it
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helps
easily
circulate during peak hours.

In conclusion
, although building
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train
and
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subway
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lines
can alleviate the volume of
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traffic
. It seems to me that, extending
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roads
is a better
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IELTS essay government should build train and subway line to reduce traffic jam others however believe that building more and wider roads is a better way to reduce the traffic jam

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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