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Crime is becoming a serious concern. Some think that more actions can be taken while others think that little actions can be done. Discussion both views

Crime is becoming a serious concern. Some think that more actions can be taken while others think that little actions can be done. Discussion both views NynJg
In this modern world, crime has been a focal issue which is spreading all over the world rapidly. A section of people who believe that enormous steps can be taken to abolish such crime, however, it is commonly argued by some that less actions should be taken. In this essay, i will discuss the both views of the argument and provide some logics to support my point of view. On the one hand, to prevent crime, government can be taken lots of actions. The most important thing is that the implementation of laws and set capital punishment. Offenders will think twice before committing any crime if the punishment is set. As a result, the number of crime will be reduced. To illustrate, a group of American journalists, published an article on Facebook, mentioned in it, 30% of bad activities has been gone when American government announced a law against crime. Implementing law is the most common way of reducing worst task from any nations. On the other hand, sometimes poverty and illiteracy influence them to commit offences because of not obtaining any social or governmental facilities. Some say that little actions can be done against offences. Criminal they did not get such activities by born. Situation and mindset have taken them to a dark world. They are not afraid of being caught which makes them confident to get in touch with wrong task very easily. Regarding this concept many of us opine that plenty of steps cannot be set against them. Nowadays government form all over the world have been put some rules to implement in social life in order to alleviate the offences. To sum up, offence has become a concerning topic in modern world which has been led to destroy the normal social life. Therefore, the rules have to take in reality to achieving peace everywhere though it is hard to abolish the crime completely. It can be alleviated by taking revolutionary warning signs.
In this modern
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world
,
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crime
has been a focal issue which is spreading all over the
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world
rapidly
. A section of
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people
who believe that enormous steps can
be taken
to abolish such
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crime
,
however
, it is
commonly
argued by
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some
that
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less
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be taken
. In this essay,
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i
will discuss the both views of the argument and provide
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some
logics to support my point of view.

On the one hand, to
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prevent
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crime
,
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government
can
be taken
lots of actions. The most
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important
thing is that the implementation of laws and set capital punishment. Offenders will
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think
twice
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before
committing any
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crime
if the punishment
is set
.
As a result
, the number of
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crime
will be
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reduced
. To illustrate, a group of American journalists, published an article on Facebook, mentioned in it, 30% of
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bad
activities has
been gone
when American
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government
announced a law against
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crime
. Implementing law is the most common way of reducing
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worst
task from any nations.

On the other hand
,
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sometimes
poverty and illiteracy influence them to commit
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offences
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because
of not obtaining any social or governmental facilities.
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Some
say that
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little
actions can
be done
against
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offences
. Criminal they did not
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get
such activities by born. Situation and mindset have taken them to a dark
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world
. They are not afraid of
being caught
which
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makes
them confident to
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get
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wrong
task
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very
easily
. Regarding this concept
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many
of us opine that
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plenty
of steps cannot
be set
against them.

Nowadays
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government
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form
all over the
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world
have
been put
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some
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rules
to implement in social life in order to alleviate the
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offences
.

To sum up,
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offence
has become a concerning topic in modern
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world
which has
been led
to
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destroy
the normal social life.
Therefore
, the
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rules
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have to
take in reality to achieving peace everywhere though it is
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hard
to abolish the
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crime
completely. It can
be alleviated
by taking revolutionary warning signs.
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IELTS essay Crime is becoming a serious concern. Some think that more actions can be taken while others think that little actions can be done. Discussion both views

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
326 words
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