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Government officials should rely on their own judgment rather than unquestioningly carry out the will of the people they serve.

Government officials should rely on their own judgment rather than unquestioningly carry out the will of the people they serve. xaXMw
Government is the main entity that governs the country. The progress and status of the country are reflected by the work done by the government. The prompt suggests that instead of unquestioningly following all the commands of officials higher up in the hierarchy. Government officials should rely on their own judgment. I don't completely agree with this statement and believe that a government official should follow his/her orders but should question and act against those commands which seem immoral and corrupt. Firstly, while forming rules and policies the government mostly takes into account the welfare of the majority of people. Being the main governing body of the country or state, such policies are made in a holistic manner. If every government official relies on their own judgment rather than following the instruction provided, it will do more harm than good as the judgment of each individual government official may vary, thus leading to a disordered and unpredictable system that will inevitably lead to chaos. A structured and uniform system should be followed which is applicable to most civilians encompassing some exceptional cases so that minorities will not be left behind. For example, in many countries - especially Asian countries - during the entrance exams for government jobs or applying to government universities, everyone should take the same exam but there are certain quotas for the minority especially people belonging to minority caste. However, if some government official thinks this is unjust and such quotas should not exist and changes the exam rules accordingly without understanding why such quotas were created, will do more harm than good. Such a decision may lead to a severe backlash and protest from the people belonging to the minority castes. However, there may be instances where a government official may receive some immoral and biased instruction from officials above them in the hierarchy. During such scenarios, it is the duty of the government official to question and act against such instructions. These situations arise when instructions are received from corrupt officials or there is a major flaw in the policies created, whichever the case, such instructions should be revolted against. If voices are not raised against such instructions, similar situations will proliferate in the future. For example, in Nepal, the civilians faced more than a decade of power cuts due to corruption. The managing director of the national electricity association had been selling the electricity generated illegally to other countries. This continued for a decade as government officials working under the director did not question and act against such unethical behavior. Only after a decade, the situation came to light. In conclusion, government officials should carry out the instructions assigned to them unless the received instructions are immoral or biased; such instructions should be questioned and be acted against.
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Government
is the main entity that governs the
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country
. The progress and status of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
are reflected
by the work done by the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
. The prompt suggests that
instead
of
unquestioningly
following all the commands of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
officials
higher up in the hierarchy.
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Government
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officials
should rely on their
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own
judgment. I don't completely
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agree
with this statement and believe that a
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government
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official
should follow his/her orders
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but
should question
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and


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act
against those commands which seem immoral and corrupt.

Firstly
, while forming
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rules
and policies the
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government
mostly
takes into account the welfare of the majority of
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people
. Being the main governing body of the
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country
or state, such policies
are made
Consider replacing "in a holistic manner" with the adverb for "holistic"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a holistic manner
. If every
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government
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official
relies on their
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own
judgment
rather
than following the
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instruction
provided, it will do more harm than
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good
as the judgment of each individual
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government
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official
may vary,
thus
leading to a disordered and unpredictable system that will
inevitably
lead to chaos. A structured and uniform system should
be followed
which is applicable to most civilians encompassing
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some
exceptional cases
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so
that
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minorities
will not be
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left
behind.
For example
, in
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many
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countries
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-
especially
Asian
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countries
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-
during the entrance exams for
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government
jobs or applying to
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government
universities, everyone should take the same exam
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but
there are certain quotas for the
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minority
especially
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people
belonging to
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minority
caste.
However
, if
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some
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government
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official
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thinks
this is unjust and such quotas should not exist and
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changes
the exam
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rules
accordingly
without understanding why such quotas
were created
, will do more harm than
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
. Such a decision may lead to a severe backlash and protest from the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
belonging to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
minority
castes.

However
, there may be instances where a
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government
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official
may receive
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some
immoral and biased
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instruction
from
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officials
above them in the hierarchy. During such scenarios, it is the duty of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
official
to question and act against such
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instructions
. These situations arise when
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instructions
are received
from corrupt
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officials
or there is a major flaw in the policies created, whichever the case, such
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instructions
should
be revolted
against. If voices are not raised against such
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instructions
, similar situations will proliferate in the future.
For example
, in Nepal, the civilians faced more than a decade of power
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cuts
due to corruption. The managing director of the national electricity association had been selling the electricity generated
illegally
to other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
. This continued for a decade as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
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officials
working under the director did not question and act against such unethical behavior.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Only
after a decade, the situation came to light.

In conclusion
,
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government
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officials
should carry out the
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instructions
assigned to them unless the received
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
instructions
are immoral or biased; such
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instructions
should
be questioned
and
be acted
against.
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IELTS essay Government officials should rely on their own judgment rather than unquestioningly carry out the will of the people they serve.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
464 words
6.0
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