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Goverments should spend money on railway rather than roads

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Railways and roads cost a substantial amount of money to maintain and build. Some people believe that spending more money on railways would be more efficient. This essay will discuss why allocating more money to railways would be beneficial for these countries. We will start by showing why more people would benefit more from increased maintenance as well as improvements to the railway compared to roads and then how this would impact the less fortunate. The amount of people taking trains has decreased significantly over the past century on account of the lowering of prices of fuel, and cars along with the now widespread use of airplanes. While this has been going on the railways have suffering, despite this the amount of people who would be willing to use them ever increases as most people are turning to most environmentally friendly ways of travel. Roads are a most useful tool of any nation, but because you will only be able to use them provided you have access to some mode of transportation, since more and more people choose not to, roads are not accessible to all and therefore not benefitted by all. Railways in some countries are falling into a state of disrepair, because of this many countries such as England have decided to privatise them to reduce costs. Instead of a success this has been a failure, ticket prices have gone up and conditions on trains have gotten worse. This situation has affected the poorest of the nation, which then struggle to get to work, since trains are the fastest way to travel and by far the most connected in most countries, the benefits of cheaper tickets due to increased funding would be enormous as it would have an impact on the most in need and provide a sure way of travel for all. Benefits of increasing the funding of railways are enormous, while there may be downsides this would help the country’s infrastructure and be an inclusive way of travel for all while having very few downsides.
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cost a substantial amount of money to maintain and build.
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Some
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people
believe that spending more money on
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railways
would be more efficient. This essay will discuss why allocating more money to
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railways
would be beneficial for these
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countries
. We will
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start
by showing why more
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people
would benefit more from increased maintenance
as well
as improvements to the
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railway
compared to
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roads
and then how this would impact the less fortunate.

The amount of
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people
taking trains has decreased
significantly
over the past century on account of the lowering of prices of fuel, and cars along with the
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now
widespread
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use
of airplanes. While this has been going on the
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railways
have suffering, despite this the amount of
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people
who would be willing to
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use
them ever increases as most
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people
are turning to most
environmentally
friendly ways of
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travel
.
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Roads
are a most useful tool of any nation,
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you will
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mode of transportation, since more and more
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people
choose not to,
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roads
are not accessible to all and
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benefitted
by all.

Railways in
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countries
are falling into a state of disrepair,
because of this
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countries
such as England have decided to
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reduce
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of a success this has been a failure, ticket prices have gone up and conditions on trains have gotten worse. This situation has
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affected
the poorest of the nation, which then struggle to
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get
to work, since trains are the fastest way to
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travel
and by far the most connected in most
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countries
, the benefits of cheaper tickets due to increased funding would be enormous as it would have an impact on the most in need and provide a sure way of
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travel
for all.

Benefits of increasing the funding of
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railways
are enormous, while there may be downsides this would
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help
the
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country’s
infrastructure and be an inclusive way of
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travel
for all while having
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few downsides.
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IELTS essay Goverments should spend money on railway rather than roads

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
339 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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