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Going overseas for university study is an exciting prospect for many people. But while it may offer some advantages, it is probably better to stay home because of the difficulties a student inevitably encounters living and studying in a different culture. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.1

Going overseas for university study is an exciting prospect for many people. But while it may offer some advantages, it is probably better to stay home because of the difficulties a student inevitably encounters living and studying in a different culture. with this statement? v. 1
It is true that the number of students seeking overseas education in the country has increased dramatically over the last decades. Some people argue that studying abroad is an excellent opportunity for students whereas some others claim that it is better to stay in the home country. However, partially I disagree with the argument that pursuing in the home country is safer to avoid the hardships faced by the students in other countries. To begin with, the opportunities offered by the international universities is indispensable. The wide job opportunities and high income are the major attraction of students to pursue higher studies in overseas. The multinational companies and other employers directly recruit the students from the international universities soon after the completion of course, which tend more students to choose other countries like Canada and New Zealand for studying. Moreover, the better living standards offered by the European countries and the opportunity to apply for the permanent residence other attract more students to choose for studying abroad. For instance, Canada government allow international students to work along with their studies and issues new post study wok visa, which help them to stay in the country after their studies till receiving a good employer. On the other hand, there are many disadvantages for overseas education. The students find it difficult to adapt new culture and lifestyle, which is entirely different from theirs. In addition, because of the high course fees of colleges and universities, students rely on bank for financial support, and it can leads debt. For example, the students who cannot afford the high fees are forced to take educational loans with relatively high interest, and thus it leads to financial burden. In conclusion, although the students studying abroad has to face challenges during the initial period, the opportunities and lifestyle available in European countries attract more international students.
It is true that the number of
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students
seeking overseas education in the
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country
has increased
dramatically
over the last decades.
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Some
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people
argue that
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studying
abroad is an excellent
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opportunity
for
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students
whereas
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some
others claim that it is better to stay in the home
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country
.
However
,
partially
I disagree with the argument that pursuing in the home
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country
is safer to avoid the hardships faced by the
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students
in
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other
countries.

To
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begin
with, the
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opportunities
offered by the
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international
universities is indispensable. The wide job
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opportunities
and
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high
income are the major attraction of
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students
to pursue higher
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studies
in overseas. The multinational
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companies
and
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other
employers
directly
recruit the
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students
from the
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international
universities
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soon
after the completion
of course
, which tend more
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students
to choose
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other
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countries
like Canada and New Zealand for
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studying
.
Moreover
, the better living standards offered by the European
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countries
and the
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opportunity
to apply for the permanent residence
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other
attract more
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students
to choose for
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studying
abroad.
For instance
, Canada
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government
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allow
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international
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students
to work along with their
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studies
and issues new post
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study
wok visa, which
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help
them to stay in the
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country
after their
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studies
till receiving a
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good
employer.

On the
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other
hand, there are
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many
disadvantages for overseas education. The
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students
find it difficult to adapt new culture and lifestyle, which is
entirely
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different
from theirs.
In addition
,
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because
of the
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high
course fees of colleges and universities,
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students
rely on bank for financial support, and it can
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leads
debt.
For example
, the
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students
who cannot afford the
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high
fees
are forced
to take educational loans with
relatively
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high
interest, and
thus
it leads to financial burden.

In conclusion
, although the
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students
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studying
abroad
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has to
face challenges during the initial period, the
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opportunities
and lifestyle available in European
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countries
attract more
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international
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students
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
46Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Going overseas for university study is an exciting prospect for many people. But while it may offer some advantages, it is probably better to stay home because of the difficulties a student inevitably encounters living and studying in a different culture. with this statement? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
309 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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