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global warming is decreasing. What is your opinion? ? v.2

global warming is decreasing. What is your opinion? ? v. 2
Nowadays, not only the developed country, but also developing country is facing the problems associated with global warming. It is now a controversial topic whether global warming is increasing or decreasing day by day. In my opinion, I strongly believe that global warming is increasing rapidly. In this essay, I will discuss about the reasons why global warming is increasing with relevant examples of two recent statistics. Firstly, the continuous development of industries or power plants are the core reason of increasing global warming. As the new infrastructures are taking place in living habitants or forest sides, which is responsible for cutting down large number of trees. As a result, the amount of carbon-di-oxide will increase, which further accelerate the rate of global warming. For instance, a research article has been published in a Nature, a scientific journal which demonstrates developing country like Bangladesh is progressing to create a Ruppur power plant in Sundarban which would be one of the major causes of global warming in the future. So, it is conclusively clear that rapid industrialization increases the chance of global warming. Secondly, increasing livestock farming and fertiliser processing are responsible for increasing the amount of global warming. Gases which are increasing the global warming like methane, nitrogen-di-oxide comes from livestock farming and fertiliser processing respectively. For example, due to the increasing number of people, the agricultural land is decreasing. As a result, scientists continuously doing their research to produce large amount of foods in a small or artificial places with the help of fertilisers. This nitrogen-di-oxide gas increases the rate of global warming. So, this modern practice enhances the problem of global warming. To conclude, I firmly believe that rapid industrialization and modern practices of food production would increase the rate of global warming until strong regulation takes place.
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developing country
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warming
. It is
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now
a controversial topic whether
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global
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warming
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increasing
or decreasing day by day. In my opinion, I
strongly
believe that
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. In this essay, I will
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discuss about the
reasons why
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increasing
with relevant examples of two recent statistics.

Firstly
, the continuous development of industries or power plants are the core reason of
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increasing
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global
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warming
. As the new infrastructures are taking place in living habitants or forest sides, which is responsible for cutting down large number of trees.
As a result
, the amount of
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carbon-di-oxide
will
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increase
, which
further
accelerate the rate of
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warming
.
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been published
in a Nature, a scientific journal which demonstrates
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developing country
like Bangladesh is progressing to create a
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Ruppur
power plant in
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Sundarban
which would be one of the major causes of
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warming
in the future.
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that rapid industrialization
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warming.

Secondly
,
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increasing
livestock farming and
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fertiliser
processing are responsible for
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the amount of
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warming
. Gases which are
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the
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like methane,
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nitrogen-di-oxide
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comes
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fertiliser
processing
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, due to the
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increasing
number of
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people
, the agricultural land is decreasing.
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, scientists
continuously
doing their research to produce large amount of foods in a
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small
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help
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fertilisers
. This
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increases
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warming
.
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So
, this modern practice enhances the problem of
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global
warming.

To conclude
, I
firmly
believe that rapid industrialization and modern practices of food production would
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increase
the rate of
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global
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warming
until strong regulation takes place.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay global warming is decreasing. What is your opinion? ? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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